Spear me
With your devil's horns.
Make blood run like water
From these pores.
Spill the drink
Of my eternal life.
I beg you please,
Take my soul tonight.
Let me fetch you what you need,
For I shall let you make me bleed.
Torch me with your sinful eyes,
While I pleasure you betwix your thighs.
I shall only return
For you alone,
My veins do churn.
Until time exists no more,
Let me be my devil's whore.
My addiction. My desire.
My hands shake when you're gone,
My body quivers when you're close.
Feed my hunger with your lips,
Make me hunger for your hips.
I crave your warmth, surround me now.
Let me feel the pain drain out.
Flow within my veins,
I crave you even more in chains.
Whip me, until I need your touch,
Beat me, until I need the lust.
Force me to feel the pain,
Upon my chest leave your stain.
I hunger for your touch,
Tonight, will you be my crutch.
To hear your voice
And taste your lips,
Makes me quiver in this bliss.
Make me beg for your taste,
On hands and knees,
without you,
I shall waste.
With the wind I shall fade,
Feed my hunger bring my pain.
I shall not exist, unless you're near,
Until once again,you find me here.
My being and soul evaporate,
On my face you can desicrate.
I'll find you once more,
So that I may be my Devil's whore.
My addiction. My desire.
Tie me up into knots,
With your rope, with my thoughts.
Do things that I dare not speak,
Plunge that knife in so deep.
Take my soul and my will,
For it is yours alone to spill.
Mold me into your perfect slave,
For it is you that I crave.
I feel your heartbeat
So sinfully sweet
Within your chest
Searing pain, I like best
For it holds the only key,
To the man I used to be.
Spear me
With your devil's horns.
Make blood run like water,
From these pores,
Let me be my Devil's whore.
My addiction. My desire.
Author notes
Prompt:
"I'll be your mentor..; be addicted to me."
A contest entry
- Make Me Perfection by adsaige.
600 points, ended October 12, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I must say CONGRATS my friend. I'm really proud of you! Seeing this at the beginning and now at the end.. Its a wonderful transformation! Simply beautiful and wonderfully dark!
Awesome write from an awesome person!
Well done!
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On one note, you spelled veins wrong...but it's alright.
I must say, I've fallen more in love with this piece than before. Your additions to this piece made it all the more arousing in it's state, and it truly captures not only the reader's interest as it needs to, but also in a sense a dark, sadistic/masochrist movement that fans of the dark/macabre will love. Either way, this piece can be complimented into many different ways, and I can assure you, this revised piece is simply fantastic. Who cares if you're a perfectionist, outstanding! -
Judged
Thank you for entering the prompt!!! I saw the imagery in this, the plain subtle intensity of this, the echo and whisper of the words, the easy forming of the words on my lips and the edges on my mind.
Let me fetch you what you need
For I shall let you make me bleed
Torture me with your eyes
While I pleasure you
With the loins between my thighs
Again and again I shall return
To you and you alone
Until time exists no more
Strong intense stanze...my only "problem" with this is the potential...it's fragile in your hands as this write is too short to get across the highest level of you intensity...point being, though you maintained the level of power though the piece, it lowered at times simply because there were not enough words to substain. Do not get me wrong, raw talent, scrubbed from foolishness...add stanzas, maintain impact, re-write, re-enter and entrance me.
Welcome to the finalist list.
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