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broken pieces

Life falls around me like a straight jacket;
as the reflections of time passed,
breaks the mirror of todays existence.

Sometimes a memory,only sees what it wants to believe.

Giving trust to UN-trusting things,
shatters the hope of tomorrows beliefs ,
one dream from waking up sane.

Putting faith in what I don't see,
I find myself grasping at toxic air
breathing my way into asphyxiation.

Shouting at the top of my silence,
I can't even hear myself anymore
deciding what I should feel,
because sometimes I feel to much.

Fighting between a war,
of fire and reign.....
I victimize my own wrath of emotion.

Taking myself to places unknown,
without invitation it seems
understanding the difference between,
a simple dream and reality.

Sculpting my own destiny,
as the wheel of fortune churns
stopping where it may.

Leaving me in a reflection,of yesterdays broken pieces.





















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  • whitewinged1
    January 15

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    We must all put a certain amount of faith in what we do not see. And what we do not see IS tomorrow. For without
    faith is to be without Hope.And without hope we are spiritless. Without spirit we are void of life, and i don't mean existence. A very thought provoking write.Keep the faith!

  • Ender Tyberius
    December 18, 2007

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    Wonderful!

    This is a really amazing piece!

    Fighting between a war,
    of fire and reign.....
    I victimize my own wrath of emotion.

    I think this is my favorite part. I'm not sure why but this writing is inspirational. Not so much the beginning but the end..yes. This whole thing read like a story 10 pages long...thick with imagery and thought..not sure if that makes sense or not but well done, I loved every line of it!


  • Tasha-Linette gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    I can relate to this very much. This is an excellent write. You are very talented. Keep up the good work! Bravo!


    • mysticallytamed
      November 27, 2007
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      thanks

      I am glad u liked, sucks to be able to relate to this feeling though. Thanks for leaving a comment and taking the time to read something of mine!

  • stavykm gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    I Loved This Write

    Broken Pieces is a perfect title. I liked this poem because I could relate to the insanity of emotions or mind and heart within my own self. The first line Life falls around me like a straight jacket; then the last line Leaving me in a reflection, if yesterdays broken pieces. Excellent write of emotions, thank you for sharing with me Kelle Marie, stavykm


  • ArcaneBeast
    October 21, 2007

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    Indeed, this made me think as well. Life can be harsh at times and things get thrown at us that we least expect. And I think you dont even have writers block, not after reading this.

  • whitewinged1
    October 14, 2007
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    This is a great write ! Some pieces get me wondering but this really got me thinking.I couldn't help but to find my self doing a little soul searching and taking inventory.You did an awesome job with this piece.It does not look like you are going through writers block to me.
    Bravo !! Well done !! Ps I have every song AC/DC ever put out you have good taste. Take care.


    • mysticallytamed
      October 14, 2007
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      thanks

      thnx so much for the wonderful comment,I sure do appreciate it! I am having a bad time with this block,and comments really do help...luv ac/dc.. thanks again!
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