As shadows fall,
only in dreams
do we make love
beneath a veil of dying stars;
and I would rather sleep my life away,
than look upon an empty sky.
Author notes
Prompt: Dead Stars
See also Dying Stars [1] http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3475320
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A contest entry
- Dead Stars by Virgoan.
500 points, ended October 12, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Short, powerful and beautiful.
Well done fellow poet.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck.
VIRGOAN
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so sweet and short and smimple and beautiful... flawless in fact i loved this
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That was so perfectly written and true. Well done!
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This is great again, I love short poems like this, what's the point in writing 90 lines of bullshit when you can get straight to the point in just a few, love it my friend, deep and meaningful,
well done again!
Alex.
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I admit this one didn't have the impact its sequel did but I can see the seed of inspiration in it that grew to full blown excellence.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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But when at night and every gleaming like fills your eyes do you ever wonder why we can't summer in Alpha Centuri.
Lovely thought.
Love, Toom B.
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An excellent short poem. In six lines you manage to convey a depth of emotion that many longer poems lack, and you do it with skill and poetic dexterity.
Bill
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living universe...
symposium matter - wafting like love on an updraft, riding thermals over other layers of clairvoyance, interpreting misery into warm, fuzzy feelings filled with life's dream journal moments...nice piece of poetry here.
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