The days of wine and roses
the winter of my soul
as always, love is fleeting
and you always pay the toll.
The days of wine and roses
a love doomed from the start.
Drunken from the fragrance of love
as your thorns pierced my heart.
The days of wine and roses
such a sacrifice of self.
You denied me your affection
putting my happiness on a shelf.
The days of wine and roses
a bitter sweet refrain.
A few glimpses of sunshine
over shadowed by your rain.
The days of wine and roses
we finally crossed that line.
The days passed, into night
as vinegar replaced the wine.
Days of pain and suffering
were all that we had left.
Pointing fingers of blame
over a love so long bereft.
Days of drugs and alcohol
had filled the empty space
of a true love heaven sent
so blessed by Gods grace.
Living under one roof
we were both so very alone.
It was now only a house
no longer a happy home.
Days and nights of addiction
dark clouds filled the sky.
We had sacrificed our love
the cost of getting high.
Seperated in distance
we went our seperate ways.
Our love slowly diminished
as it vanished in the haze.
Author notes
The Days of Wine and Roses
This poem was inspired by the move with Jack Lemon. Just as he got sober and his wife didn't. She chose her addiction over her man and their daughter and walked away into the night under the glow of the street lights and into oblivion. He chose to pick up the pieces of his life and live and love his daughter for the both of them.
My relationship with my babies mother pretty much ended the same way on March 31st 2006. On November 1st 2007 I wrote this poem as a way of getting some closure. I recently mailed this poem some pictures of our daughter and a letter to her telling her that I would forever more have to lover her from a distance. I cried when I wrote this poem, because I finally gave myself permission to grieve the death of our relationship!
On March 9th of 2009 Lori Ann Gray, the Mother of my Daughter
Marlana Alyssa Reed, was found dead of a Heroin Overdose. That was yesterday. I recieved this news only hours ago. Though I have had to love her from a distance. It doesn't change the fact that....
I Loved her more than life it self!
I feel like a piece of my heart and soul has been ripped from my body and now I have to rip heart and soul from my six and a half year old Daughter when I tell her that Mommy is dead!
I am so utterly devistated. I don't think there are words sufficent enough in the language of Man to describe how I'm feeling right now.
All I know is, my life in the real world does not encompas people with a depth of sincerity and understanding that I so desperately need right now! So I am turning to the only people I feel a true connection with. My friends and future friends here on All Poetry
http://fractaleyes.deviantart.com/art/Days-of-Wine-and-Roses-60916549
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Comments
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It's a good write to be true. Starts out happy, gets sad. I'm sorry. I just don't know what to say. That's not necesarily bad though.
Best of luck and great write.
Matt -
I loved it. You did an excellent job with the rhyming, that was probably the best part of it. I really enjoyed reading this, thank you for entering and good luck!
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I want to cry. This was so sad, and brilliant. Sorry to hear about your late wife. I can only imagine how that feels. Stay strong and keep writing.
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This is such a brilliant poem and so heartfelt, I could feel the pain and anguish in every word here. Thank you so much for sharing this story with us. Well done and all the best for the contest.
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This is a heart touching and saddening read, your journey in a life once with love is described beautifully and painfully in this piece! I feel this piece. I'm sorry for your loss, Thank you for your touching entry. Great work on this.
Evershine
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Horrific write!
I wanted to say that though I am no-one in your life, I am here for you as a friend. You are a very brave man, you have had to make some pretty tough choices, I am proud that you chose to give a good life to your little girl. My heartaches for your loss, the mother of your child. -
the repition works very well in this poem, and it is very beautiful. i really enjoyed it. nice descriptions, nice flow. and wow congratulations on all those trophies! take care
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This was very very good!!! I loved it and good luck in my contest and thank you for entering!!
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my, my what a tragedy, i am so sorry for your loss and for your daughters loss to. i can not begin to imagine the pain you and your daughter must be sufffering, but your friends on allpoetry are here for you and if i can help i truly will try if you need someone to talk cry or shout at then message me .
on the poem side, well done it really was great and showed your emotion . wonderful
you are in my finalists list
thanks for entering
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this poem is so beautiful
i love it
there is so much emotion
this is what i'm looking for
great job
a finalist
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This has won many deserved trophys and the regrets are so very real I am sorry for your loss the loss of a loved on is beyond hard (ask me I know personally right now)) and I thought your poem did a good job on saying what was felt. Thank you for sharing such a personal write.
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This is a very heartfelt poem. I'm sorry this happened. As for the poem, I really liked the repetitive nature of the first lines, but I feel it was interupted by "Living under one roof" as a first line. I really did enjoy this, though. Thanks for sharing.
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Made me go wow. Beautiful! So sad at the same time.
Favorite lines: Drunken from the fragrance of love
as your thorns pierced my heart.
and..
You denied me your affection
putting my happiness on a shelf.
and..
A few glimpses of sunshine
over shadowed by your rain.
and.. The days passed, into night
as vinegar replaced the wine.
So many amazing lines! Hard to choose
Overall score: 9.6/10
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Aww, so tragic and the words and the emotion were just perfect. I could really feel what you felt. Great job! Thanks for entering.
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Omg...this is so sad...it's beautiful. Thank yo ufor entering it..
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I sympathise
Amazing write.My brother dies,aged 27 of a drug overdose in February 1989. He was found on my other brothers 24th birthday.I was 17 at the time and felt angry with him.He chose drugs above all else and needlessly died young.I refused to go to the funeral,and now 20 years later am still regreting that decision.This write hit me,spoke to me.Meant so much to me.God bless.If you so care to e mail me. My email address is
purple1996@live.com
I am in England,in the midlands.
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Thank you for your heart felt comment. After she died I wrote a final poem concerning her. Here's the link if your interested.
Soul Mates Interupted
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5133391
Bill
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This is so beautiful and so sad at the same time. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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''The days of wine and roses
a love doomed from the start.
Drunken from the fragrance of love
as your thorns pierced my heart."
wow. this is wonderful...a beautiful write.
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This is one of the most beautiful writes I've read so far on AP...it has it all: the great rhyming, lovely images, a sad heart-wrenching story and the lines! that just went straight to my heart....
''The days of wine and roses
a love doomed from the start.
Drunken from the fragrance of love
as your thorns pierced my heart.
The days of wine and roses
such a sacrifice of self.
You denied me your affection
putting my happiness on a shelf.''
this is true poetry...
I'm very sorry about what happened, it's always hard to loose someone so close to you
take care
Suza
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This has very beautiful imagery. It is fabulously written and has a beautifully sad message. That is what I am looking for. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Heart-breaking! That was the first thing that came to mind. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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Great write! Keep it up!
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Forgot the points..
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Great Job thanks for entering.
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good rhythem and rhyme. didnt seem to forced. i was very interested in reading the authors notes to support the poem too. thank you for providing those.
thanks for entering this little gem.
Emmy -
this paints such a beautiful picture. the raw storyline reminded me of GLASS, a favorite book of mine. but anyway, very nice write.
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Yeh, agree with previous comments, well written, full of emotive feeling.
My first marriage ended due to active addiction. Funny how that gave the opportunity to get clean and sober (thank God!).
Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely -Emmjay
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this is wonderfully written and will be considered in the finalists. thank you for your entry and i wish you well in the judging. i hope you have entered more than one write. viyanna rosemarie
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wow
this was amazing......each line you feel the astangment and hopelessness of love shattered.....you have writen one hell of a poem here......the first one that i have read that even comes close to what i was looking for.....thank you for entering my contest i am honored to have such talent entered in it.......200 points will be added to the pot from this moment......bless you always and best of luck within the contest
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Amazing
I love your rhyme!!!!!
Living under one roof
we were both so very alone.
It was now only a house
no longer a happy home.
Did you have a camera in my house? This is so much a snapshot of my awful reality! Great job, thanks for entering and good luck!
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Absolutly fantastic. i could feel the emotion seeping through every heart wrenching word. this is a heart breaking write so full of pain and hurt. The truth behind your words is amazing. I am so sorry for your pain. A fantastc write thank you for entering my contest and keep up the good work
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My condolences ...
on your situation.
Thanks for entering.
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This is amazing, I can feel the emotion in the words. Thanks for entering.
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This is heartwrenching! Both the poem and the Author's Notes. I know this came from the very depths of your heart and soul, one can feel it! You did a great job on this one!
The emotion is amazing!
Best of luck in this contest!
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An amazing poem! but yet again one i must DQ my rules do say "only enter poems that have no trophies"
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Wonderful write that you have here. Very emotional. I can feel that you wrote this directly from your heart. I am sorry that you had to feel this way about your child's mother. Hopefully you are still in the childs life even if you can't be in the mothers. Hope things go well with you. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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good job!
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Thank you for showing this to me. I feel as though you know exactly what I'm going through with this. It feels good not to be alone in the world with this experience.
Pure poetry.
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this is beautiful and of course sad. I remember the movie and am thinking Lee Remick played the wife. Suburb acting by both and such a sad ending, yet with addictions that is the way of life. My son is choosing booze over family right now and I guess it's time for me to finally give up hope of any change. We talk and I always want to leave a door open in case ... lovely work as always.
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I just wanted to say that this poem is very touching and I think you should try and get it published x
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wow! i love the honesty, both in the poem and in the authors notes.
You denied me your affection
putting my happiness on a shelf. this is a powerful line, i too have had someone choose drugs over me, i feel this poem completly, well done really x -
Such an emotionally powerful write and so beautifully crafted and reading your notes made it all the more deeply personal. Brilliant and you now deserve good luck with everything you do
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This is very good. I like it. I can feel the emotion in this work. Good luck in my contest!
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very good write. very emtional and beautifully written.
thanks for your entry and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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This is a very emotional poem. I read and understand just where you are going from. Good job thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Loved this... Good luck in my contest!
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Love it and good luck to you.
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Really great use of repetition in this poem. Good luck in my contest, grat write!
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An excellent use of a cinematic classic to delve into the pain felt inside. The evolution of the relationship is quite well shown. Sometimes we have to walk away to save ourselves from a situation, sometimes we are the ones who stay to be the rock in the lives of those we love.
excellent write
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I like the how the heading was repetative than it switched from beauty to ugly... how relationships fluctuate... thank you for entering my contest
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wow. i am so sorry that something like this happened to you.
but it helped inspire a great piece.
i thoroughly enjoyed reading it.. and i loved how it was a type of story.
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its so sad how drugs can mess things up even the best things. you really created something special here an maybe it can even inspire her to stop drugs someday i hope. all the stanzas could stand alone as separate poems with amazing statements. i also like how the beginning of the poem still had wine an roses but as it got darkerf into the problems there was no more wine an roses
Days of drugs and alcohol
Filled the empty space
Of a love heaven sent
Blessed by Gods grace
Drugs are the devil
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This has such a range of different emotions and they all are so wonderful. Beautiful work here. Thanks for sharing.
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Hi there. Congrats on the trophy.
I liked what you addressed overall. The form was fitting and, except for a few places, the rhymes were
meaningful insertions.
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This poem has a real moral to it. I really liked your rhyming and the scheme of your write. How you used the first line repetitively and then changed it up when the story took a turn. You put a lot of organization into your writing and it flows perfectly.
"And vinegar replaced the wine" - my favorite line
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Yes that is so very true, very well written. My best wishes in the contest.
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww !!!!!!! this is indeed a #1 poem ~~~~~~~`
i loved it,
it is indeed a privilage to have you in my contest ,
your friend fan and host ,
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very good i like it a lot
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This is a sad and well written piece. I think that the repition of "The days of wine and rose" at the beginning of the poem would have been more effective it had been carried all the way through, rather than stopping abruplty half way into the poem. This poem, while sad, didn't make me feel or wow me in any way, unfortunately. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck!
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Days and nights of addiction
Dark clouds filled the sky
We sacrificed our love
The cost of getting high"
Wow very powerful lines in a very powerful peice! Bravo!
Goodluck!!
~dawn&hearts
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this is a good poem it's got great flow and words are used very well and percicly Good Luck!!!!
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When I have a little more time tomorrow, I will come back and comment this properly...but all I can say for the moment is, without a doubt, this is simply touching beyond belief.
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Oh my gosh this is an amazing write!!! I felt it even more reading your authors notes. I hope that something good comes your way in life, you sound like a genuine man and that is hard to come by these days. Best of luck to you and your baby!
~Princess
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wow... great job! this is amazing, but really sad... its terrible how some people can walk away from everything that they once cared about... amazing poem though... great job and best of luck in this contest!
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I so know what it is like to live with an alcoholic! He was one and this was a wonderful write I love the way you told all that was wrong but made it seem good because I can remember back and then itdidn't seem bad because I wanted so much for everything to be good... I wanted it all to be fine! Thank you for the wonderful entry!
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I have to start by sending a BIG hug over the Internet, because I am very sorry for what you went through. It must've been very rough, and also very tough to actually put it on paper(a.k.a. on the Internet).
The one thing I can point out about your poem is the...well, complete lack of punctuation. I know, I said I am not crazy about it, but ...at least something? You should really spend a few minutes re-writing it with proper punctuation, and this poem could be even more appealing to the reader. It had an impact on me, and I am sure it had on many other-just think how would it be if the reader wouldn't try figuring out what should've been where!
Besides that, I like the repeating line "The days of wine and roses", and the way it makes the reader think (seeing it's the title) it's going to be a love poem (happy love poem), yet it's not. Absolutely admiring, nice choice of title!
All in one, this was a pretty good poem! Thank you for entering and good luck!
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I am sorry for your loss and what you went through. letting go of a relationship, especially one so deep is always hardest and we can tend to linger over it for years at a time and one day, we'll just break down and accept it.
with truth, comes understanding and with understanding we can let go sometimes.
i am sorry for what you have been through but it has made you all the more, stronger and your daughter must be super proud of you and all that you have done for her. it is never easy to do what you have done.
i must commend you on it. You're awesome and this poem is beautiful. i hope your lady reads it and understands just how much pain you went through.
-mel-
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Wow. This was wonderful.
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As I read this, I found my voice getting softer and softer until I only mouthed the last line. The repetition of your words leads the reader to the natural conclusion of fading away. This is definitely a dark, mournful write, a murmur directed toward the light. I will admit it, I cried. Gorgeous, darling, and insightful and thought provoking, to boot.
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Wow...I think that you did an exceptional job writing this. I didn't know the foreground of the piece until I read your author notes but I did get the same idea from the poem when I read it.
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Awesome poem.I think it would make good song lyrics. I'm looking forward to reading more
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Even without the author notes it was quite obvious that this was painfully personal. The emotions run strong and deep throughout the lines here. The third line of the first stanza seems a bit... I dunno, jumbled maybe?
Ever love is fleeting
The first word, "ever" doesn't feel right to me. I wonder if perhaps you meant something else. Regardless, it is a lovely poem in all its painful memories. I'm sorry this had to be such a personal rendition of your own life experience. While I am here let me also say, "Welcome to Allpoetry"! I hope your time here is pleasurable.
♥ Touchof1der
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