You lay there screaming your name,
Yet no one hears your voice of desperation,
You look in the mirror for someone to blame,
And see yourself helpless in this situation,
Why must you be ignored in silence?
You ask yourself why your world is closing in?
You long for the words of a friendly voice,
Yet you are enclosed by these walls from within,
It seems you have no choice,
But to shout your name in silence,
The dark seems to be your only companion,
As you long for the glowing warmth of the light,
But the light is drifting away leaving behind a canyon,
You know that you cannot win this fight,
So you must suffer in silence,
You open your heart to this world,
Only to be rejected and cast aside,
So you lay all alone shivering and curled,
The dark tempting you to suicide,
The only way to break this entombing silence.
A contest entry
- Imprisoned by Corinthians13-4.
470 points, ended October 26, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Silence by insearchofsweetness.
875 points, ended January 7, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i love this poem i understand wat you are talking bout i hve a poem kindof like that...
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I liked the "canyon" metaphor. Very heavy words you have here. Thank you for your entry in my contest!
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First I just want to say I really like the picture. Your poem was very well written and has good feeling in it. Keep Writing!
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this was a complete treasure to read, love. there is such raw emotion showing through that there is no way i could possible not feel partially what you felt when writing this. I feel i can completely relate in my own way, and thats what poetry is supposed to be about... writing something truly amazing, and having it actually mean something, in different ways to different people, but mainly for yourself.
"You open your heart to this world,
Only to be rejected and cast aside,"these two lines really hit home with me. this really captures the feelings of having opened yourself, your heart to the world, only to be shunned, not knowing if there will ever be a time for you to trust again.
i truly enjoyed this poem and i cant wait to read more of your work.
keep up the amazing work dearie
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thxs for your comment i'm glad u enjoyed reading it and glad that u understood the poem so well
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Amazing!!!!
omg... that was so amaing I cant believe you wrote that I am totally impressed.. I think that this is my favorite.... I love it!
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thxs for the comment. i'm glad u liked it
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your a good writer i wish i where that good
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thxs for the comment and u r already good
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No it is not, shout if you must be heard that way. Life is a quiet way to make ourselves something unique and supreme.
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but wats the point in shouting if your voice is not heard?
thxs for the comment
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silence that alone is death, i really love the picture
painted with your choice of words.great read and best of luck
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thxs for the comment. glad u enjoyed reading my poem
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Suicide is never the answer. Although I do believe that people have that choice, and to each his/her own. In my opinion, it is far more courageous to stick and stay, to fight against the demons, to live until fate causes death...
I liked this poem, and unlike the other comment below, think that it is finished. There is a deafening noise to silence sometimes. I can see that you've captured that with these well written words. Good luck in the contest.
arpil
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thxs for the comment. i agree suicide is not the answer but no living person should have to live with feelings of depression and the feeling of being outcast from society. thxs again for the comment.
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I agree. Depression is often misunderstood...there is light, maybe it should be sought, maybe it should be beckoned, maybe it should be engulfed. Often we allow ourselves to become isolated, and that makes things seem even darker. We must force ourselves up, out, and over our obstacles. Society is a heavy hammer and can pound us into the ground, if we let it. It is best to find a way to love who we are and forget about what society expects. I am an only child and have been a recluse most of my life. Not until I got out of my own shell could I overcome depression. We are only "outcast", if we make ourselves part of the cast in the first place. Just be! That is so much better than not being.
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true to be is way better than not being at all. its just the steps out of depression are hard to take as i have personaly been there before
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I just came out of the dark pit. I had a relationship that lasted three years and then was abruptly ended because the man thought he had found someone who was more compatible. I am also an only child, and had no one (except a close friend who also suffered from depressed thoughts). Depression is a mental illness. I have learned that more often than not we must stay out of our heads and move to our hearts. Our heart pounds us into realizing that we must love ourselves first. When we discover how truly beautiful we are no matter what others think they see, we can overcome our pain, fears, and insecurities and heal ourselves. It's been great talking to you. Sometimes that is the best medicine. The Creator brings people together for a reason. Sometimes we don't know what that reason is. I hope you never have to suffer long periods of depression ever again. I am going to try my very best to stay in the light. The dark is too hard on my body.
Be Blessed
april
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sry to hear that, but u speak great words of wisdom and i hope u find happiness. anyhow its been nice talking 2 u and take care
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wow it really made me think
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made u think wow lol thxs for the comment
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