I can't think straight
My mind is all over
My body can't take it
The pain and suffering
Being miserable not knowing what to do
My heart skipping beats
Please oh please
Help me or take me soon
My throat so clauged
My heart feeling torn
Why do I have to deal with this
I can't fake it anymore
Eyes feeling heavy
Wrist is pounding
Losing blood
I think I am now ready
To take these pills
Drink the rest of the bottle
Feeling numb all over
Puking all over my covers
Seeing things blurry not clear
Broken glass upon my floor
Blood drips from my wrist to my ankels
Only wishing to see my 3 angels
Not finished but can you give me ideas
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nice...
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Great
... Watching over me could be added to this.
Its very well written and expresses a deep emotion w hich clearly is stated
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wow, thats a really good poem. its veryy interesting and its like i can feel it. one of the best ive seen.
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ive felt....
like this before. it sucks in fact just a few days ago i felt like this.....but anyways..wonderful write
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I love this poem, it has so much emotion in it. great job!
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Freaking amazing. I love it so far.
!!!WELL DONE!!!
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thanks for the comment..........this day was really strange for me because i was really happy but when i wrote this is what came out.................thanks again
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Good
So I`m returning your favor, it was a long time since a stranger took the effort to comment one of my poems
I like this one because of your writing style and your rhyming. Although I`ve stopped writing this kind of poetry a long time ago, I can still appreciate it because I know how you can feel.
Keep it up and let the poetry be your exhaust valve
Greetz
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This is really good... as always hun. I love every part of this and I think it sounds well just the way it is.. but if ya wanna add more it could only make it better... the only thing is yo0u have one spellign mistake... (Whty do I have...)Koodles
Blessed be
Mystic
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