Shattered to pieces,
Lying broken on the floor.
No rhyme or reason,
Looking so unlike before.
What once was whole,
Now a complete mess.
What once had shape,
Will never convalesce.
The world isn't perfect,
Almost nothing can be.
My heart thought love was,
Until you broke me.
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Prompt: broken
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Thank you for entering and good luck!
Leslie -
Powerful emotion you have expressed. Very well written, straight to the point. Best of luck in the contest!
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JUDGED
short sweet and to the point.... very very good... I liked this poem a lot... It had rhyme and rhythem... something that I usually have trouble with doing myself.... I usually do not like reading rhyme poems because they always sound so forced but I really did like this one... Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest. -
pretty damn good kid,. i know exactlly what you were feeling.
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amazingly written good luck to you
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"What once was whole,
Now a complete mess.
What once had shape,
Will never convalesce."
I loved this little stanza, especially the rhyming of "mess" with "convalesce", not the typical rhyme and exactly what I was looking for. A lovely, profound write. Thanks for entering! -
wow that was wonderful....i really like this one.....thanks for the entry and best of luck
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