Feel my erection
Throbbing, pulsing member
Hungry for a release
Carnal needs, remembered
Feel the tip glide against soft skin
Crease the delicateness
Slipping ever downwards towards
The sanctuary, to be buried
Parting with amazing care
Slip the tip in and exhale air
Feel the throbbing, threaten to explode
My bleeding wounds, my virgin hole
Masturbating amid the blood
Drop the blade, and begin to suck
Drinking my blood, while thrashing my member
This will be a night to remember.
Author notes
Option 5
A contest entry
- Wicked Games and Lithium Dreams [18+] by Immortal Obscurity.
900 points, ended October 19, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice way of ending this poem lol.
Parting with amazing care
Slip the tip in and exhale air
Feel the throbbing, threaten to explode
My bleeding wounds, my virgin hole
interesting choice of words. good luck in the contest. oh and here are more of the happy clappy dudes your so fond of lmao.
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What can I say? I like playing with words, lol. More happy clappy dudes? You sure you're not overdosing me on them? lmao.
Glad you enjoyed this piece Bell, it's a little abstract, lol. -
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na those happy clappy dudes are gonna keep on coming lol
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I'm not complaining
lol
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Well Good lol
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okay let's see if I get this ... it's an erection's journey to pleasure - but then what?
lol! sorry, but sometimes it has to be made quite obvious to me - where does the blood come from? is it somebody who cut him off?
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The second stanza is actually written about a knife and it's journey into flesh, lol. Thanks for commenting and the claps Chantelle
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W00T!!!
GO YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!!1
I L-O-V-E it!!!! Can't have a sexual experience without knives, pain, and BLOOD!! KUDOS
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Thanks Syn I wouldn';t say amazing though...lol. Just mediocre
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*cough cough*
WOW... Assuming that this is Option 5... Good job! This was very erotic, and definitely very gory, although I suppose I was looking for something with a little more of and emotional edge to it. Still, very well done.. Just please put your option in the authors' notes. Thank you for your entry, and good luck in my contest.
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Ahahaha, I like the intro its just like.
"Oh, hello! This will be a sex poem!" lmao
I looove it. Especially the bloody gory part...Mmm. So sexy. Great job as always!
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Thanks Kat Glad you enjoyed this piece
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yeah gore don't usually do much for me, my stomach wasn't really up for that last stanza today, so well done, I know you'll secretly be pleased lol
Good write though, you managed to do excatly what you say I'm best up, leading me on to think one thing, then doing the bloody opposite...pun intended
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Well... I'm not much into the "drinking my blood" bit but other than that this is a really really sexy poem. Not that you need it but good luck in the contest.
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on this piece. Thanks for the good luck wishes too, greatly appreciated
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