i.
Last night
I saw the blue moon,
Touching
isolated grains of sand.
ii.
Eyes half open, half closed-
at first glance,
I thought-
it was God's arms.
I knew.
iii.
Night winds sweep-
the sand,
and arms.
Closer,
my body reached-
the remains.
Then, I realize
a single looking
sand like diamond
staring at me.
Author notes
What is lovely never dies,
but passes into other loveliness,
star-dust, or sea-foam, flower or winged air.
~ Thomas Bailey Aldrich
A contest entry
- what is lovely never dies by Nicolette.
1000 points, ended October 7, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cleaning out the closet [My Favourites Only] by Naridill.
425 points, ended November 9, 2007, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is another beautiful poem by you, the imagery is outstanding, I love your voice..you do vignettes so well...I have no suggestions, Hensley...at all..lol..
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Beautifully phrased. This one is stunning in imagery.
Thanks for entering and much luck
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This was a very interesting piece. I liked the concept you have used here. This piece flows really well and your message came through loud and clear. I can see why this poem won an honorable trophy. Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck.
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wow...got to catch my breath after reading this spectacular poem of yours...have you ever tried joining the Palanca or the Miclat Poetry Contests? well you should join them...kasi kung ganito kaganda ang mga isasali mo..definitely you'll have a good chance of winning...I'm so proud of you kabayan...
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Sana makasali na ako sa susunod na taon. Mga limang taon lang naman nauudlot ang aking pagsali. I'll check Miclat Poetry Contest as well.
Salamat at nagustuhan mo ang aking tula.
Cheers Kabayan!
HENSLEY
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a extrodinary moment~ one that most people wouldn't see, but I've always said poets see the world differently
one small granular at a time, sometimes.
Lovely for sure.
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This one hit me on a very personal note. My father passed away recently and asked that we scatter his ashes at sea. We did. This poem made me think of him. His arms, the dark winds, the single looking sand like diamond staring at me...as if it was him, on the sandy beaches. Well done. This one touched me deeply.
~Lyrical
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Lovely poetry... especially the 2nd vignette. I like this form very much as it allows the poet and the reader so many different directions within the same theme. Good use of line breaks too - you do know how to apply this poetic device to enhance the impact of a poem. I liked this one - thank you so much for your entry.
~ Nicolette
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There is pure beauty in these words, just lovely.
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