Your smile, your touch, your memories are reeling in my mind
Each night I am waking for these visions
Like a bird, I am swinging.
I am whirling, like a boomerang I return from where I started.
I am keeping your love in my blood.
My entire world has been captured by you and your majesty.
Though this passion, I know seems very common
My sky is filled with thy smile, thy love
Each day I want to wake up from sleep inhaling your smell, My Love.
Take me away with you forever
For I want a eternal love
To spread in your arms.
Author notes
Hello, This is a poem written in my diary when I first fell in love, we are together for six years. Though I never write poems in any script but however I wrote it in one of my diaries. When I am without any stress or without any particular thought, I think, usually about my love.
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- Where the mind drifts by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended February 11, 2008, 18 entries
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Thanks for your nice comment.
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there's a flattery that doesn't fall flat on ears :"My sky is filled with thy smile, " reactively liked
a poet to be among consistent
this reminds me we want often or securely need to structure our life and memory can be as teddy bear when attachment is a step away but sweet because it's in household or building life to fulfill story...
preview verses you provided do energize the reason entering the challenge for associatively connecting core feelings, for which your priority isn't a place but a person you would go with. I felt it aimimg for that intense note "For I want a[typo an] eternal love
To spread in your arms" as that pairing is important. It makes me think even of my daughter who'd somewhat rather have one sickness over homesick so picked up a sneezed on phone. but you had more beautiful imagery as "Like a bird, I am swinging." It conveys a regular signal to be found despite zigzaging busy.
btw there is a reply button you can opportune by anyone's comment directly instead of having to make own statement alone for each, but it will hang under theirs.
you put this powerfully in front of us,
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Thank you so much.
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very unique and well written!
TY for entering!
Lynda
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LOL, yes....great title with nice poem....rigt, in love things run crazy lol
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Thank you.
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Very Good
I liked your poem.Most of my students are romantic poets.
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Dosto
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Excellent dear. Yes, in love things really run crazy. There's no reason, no rationale....nothing at all except love and only love. I loved the entire piece but this line is somehow close to my heart
"Each day I want to wake up from sleep inhaling your smell, My Love."
Well done dosto.
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