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Blame it on the moon


See that moon,
the one with the halo
that matches yours?

 

Yes, that's the one,
the one that cries your name
and beckons me to hear it.

 

Suddenly tonight,
the stars follow it
as if they hear it also,
the echo of you
which perfection surrounds.

 

 

It is said there is only
one great love in one's life,
and for mine,
that should be you.

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  • NeonRose
    June 3, 2008

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    Love the imagery and beauty you have used to convey this amazing relationship. Truly a beautiful write!


  • skye01 gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem and I the love it conveys. Finding one's soul mate brings magic into ones life. My daughter and her husband are true soul mates and the magic that surrounds them can be seen in the light show that goes off when they are together and thoughts of the heart communicated with a look . A blessing found but by a few. Peace and Light skye01


  • Sweet Jane
    February 2, 2008
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    This is a good poem,
    I really like it.


  • trista gold member
    October 19, 2007

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    I really love the simplicity of this, and especially the last stanza that sums everything up so well. It's even a little ironic for me to read this, because my friends always used to joke that I had a halo...but that it balanced on top of my horns. I also loved the way you wrote this in a way that anyone can put themselves on the receiving end of it, even though it's (hopefully) written for that special someone in your life.

    Thank you for your entry, and good luck in the contest!

    ~J.


  • Sweet Jane
    October 5, 2007
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    Very beautiful poem


  • raspberry Greeters member
    October 5, 2007

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    Awesome..

    haha.. what a lucky person ur hubby should be to get this poem.. 'am sure u had him in mind as u wrote this.. so sweetly penned. wonderful aunt..


    • pattyann4500
      October 5, 2007
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      Thank you, my Sweet. Yes, always for my husband, but for this time and until after the contest, this is for a special lady--the hostess.


  • SexyAngel0418
    October 4, 2007

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    awesome poem gramma!!! You did such a wonderful job on this one!!! It is so beautiful!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

    PS GOod luck in the contest!!!


  • cherche -d -ame
    October 4, 2007

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    of course I love anything that would have to do with the moon and stars etc, but you were able to paint a picture of a beautiful celestial event [stars following the whispering moon] and that visual alone is worthy of a big smile [as are those tender words of yours]
    much love always
    xoxoxoxxooxoxoxoxo
    reenie;f


    • pattyann4500
      October 4, 2007
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      Thank you, my beautiful friend. It's always a blessing to hear from you. Love, Patricia

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