so there we were,
like two mummies,dancing our haunted dance.
You move left,
and i go right.
Moving to the slow,mellodic beat of the Tune.
You move right,
and i go left.
Haunting the onlookers of our Freakish sight.
You move back,
and i follow behind.
Moving to the sound of our nocturnal Fright.
You step forward,
and i step back.
Moving out way across the plain of our dance floor.
You lean back,
and i hold you up.
dont we make a horrific sight,
the shreds of our decapatatid cloth,
shining brightly on the 31st night.
we should be destroyed,
we should be gone.
dancing to the tune of our mellodic song.
Nobody wants us,
But no one is gone.
Watching our dance,
to the frightening throng.
We should be in the ground,
laying sleep and sound.
But its our 31st,
the night we dance,to our horrific song.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- All Hallows Eve by Errant Panther.
500 points, ended October 12, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything & Everything for GOLD!! by Hebz.
400 points, ended June 21, 221 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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WOW, Brilliant
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Hebz -
This is good, funny, a little creepy and creative. It's fits Halloween perfectly. I can see the ghoulish pair out on the floor doing the monster mash.
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i like it it really good!
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Although this is a wonderful piece you have written and I really did enjoy it I must remove it as this contest is for kids age 15 and under. You being 16 are over the limit stated. I sincerely am sorry
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I really get the imgagery in this piece, vividly. You did a good job here. I must admit to getting quite into it. Well done!
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I really like this one I actually got the video clip of uhm... whatever the title is by Michael Jackson in my head (scream or something?) ah well...
Anywho, that's quite a cool dance you got there
Thank you for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
You say you aren't very good at writing poetry, but from reading this I would honestly have to argue that you are cutting yourself short.
It reminds me of a very long ago night I shared with someone I loved very deeply then.
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Unusual take on the prompt, but definitely original and shows lateral thinking, well done, keep up the good work.
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A well written poem to my favorite holiday. The way you displayed the scene was moving. Now I want to dance on halloween.
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This is great poem that represents Halloween. I like how you described the dance and all of the rhythmic moves. Good luck!
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I love you sweetie!
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A very unusual and interesting poem that shows a lot of poetic talent and a rich imagination. Keep up the wonderful works, and best of luck in the contest.
Mercury Rising
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How interesting! Very dark and mysterious, and very well written. Good work, Nate! ^^
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OOOOOH sweetie the words themself are soo pretty! OMG, I love u! GREAT SWEETIE! I love u!
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I skiped over an error in my poem. im terrible sorry,but in the 27th line it should say "to the frightening throng". again,im terrible sorry but i cant find anywere to edit it.
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Go to "Edit" On the right side of your screen. {Click on the poem first.}
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