descending to three
gray matter
clouds
and heaven
seeng both sides of me
my flesh laid below me
while my soul soared
light as a feather and free
not pulled down by gravity
flesh and soul held by a single illuminized imbilical cord
and all is done by thoughts in the spirit world or a least that was the way it was for me
A contest entry
- Quantum Thoughts by islekine.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This makes me think of birth. Maybe the "umbilical cord" did it. Even the words; "gray matter". Sometimes I wish I could remember being born, where I was before being in my mother's womb, how it felt, what it tasted like... But then again, it may have been painful for me like it is for the mother giving birth so...I change my mind. LOL This is a very interesting poem. Quite the introspective work here poet.
Congratulations on winning the Emerald Trophy!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Congrats on your Honorable mention Award. Sweet poem!
I especially liked this part, flesh and soul held by a single illuminized umbillical cord! This is a great line!!
Congrats again!!
Adam
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There were a few things that were a tad bit confusing to me here. The major one being the use of the word IMBIBICAL. Did you perhaps mean to use the word "umbilical"? It seems like it to me, but I'm not even certain where your thoughts were going here so I may be way off base. Another thing I noticed was that in line six you use LAYED, should that not be "laid"? I guess I sound a bit petty and I surely don't mean to. I'm just curious. This contest has me intrigued. Good luck to ya!
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this is very beautiful...very lovely...excellent imagery...Thank you for sharing, and I do wish you always the best in everything
Good luck in the contest
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Wow,
A powerfully weaved together piece here!
Thanks for sharing, and I wish you all the best!
Keep up the awesome works, very well crafted.
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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like the imbiblical cord raggy and no gravity great imagination gold gold gold xxpp
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As you know....
I love your entry...I am in the process of judging...
and boy this is a tough one!
Thanks again for entering.
*PEACE*
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