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Shadows...

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Though this be your castle

shadows seen long upon it's walls

forever a memory in me;

So tall they stand against light,

move sigilously throughtout it's halls.

-Like escaping, are they- 

I ask myself,  

might there be more shadows?

Maybe of me? 

Maybe in...
places where I’ve been naught,

that no one knows? -or so I think 

Tenderly icy sea
it's fresh waters now encapsulate me;
sands so white, so pure.

And still I am caught in this cursed shadow fantasy.

Easily, I move my hand
while I plan to stop this mystery;

your  body a vision so naked I endure,

enjoy in times of twilight with drunken air like wine.

Now every muscle in me, tense, expectant,

suspense creeping towards me, condensed

as I put out the light.

Your manly body  -visions, reality

in my mind, delirious notions- 

the sun now sets in ways I don't understand-
Or is it day, the apocalyps of the world
I don't comprehend, but I want to, need to...

Or my secret of secrets will be within me again.
So, I sit, ponder, and yet once more,

I fight naught cursed shadows on the wall.

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  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 5, 2007

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    Amazing take on this pic prompt...A superb entry indeed I love the feeling and emotions that burst from the page into a readers's heart and soul. Reading your piece again leaves me breathless and chills run down my spine. VERY GREAT PIECE!
    I love the entire piece so much it is hard to pick out my fav. Every line flows with raw emotions and ties togethre with the rest of the poem...from begining to last.

    "Though this be your castle
    shadows seen long upon it's walls
    forever a memory in me;
    So tall they stand against light,
    move sigilously throughtout it's halls...

    your body a vision so naked I endure,
    enjoy in times of twilight with drunken air like wine.
    Now every muscle in me, tense, expectant,
    suspense creeping towards me, condensed
    as I put out the light...

    Or my secret of secrets will be within me again.
    So, I sit, ponder, and yet once more,
    I fight naught cursed shadows on the wall."

    Chilling MASTERPIECE! VERY WELL PENNED!
    Thank you for you entry and I wish you the very best in the contest!







  • jo-el
    October 4, 2007

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    wow...the voice you gave to this image is very interesting. so much intense desire you bring out. and it works the woman appears to be deep in meditation of some sort. her thoughts could very well be sensual..wanting...perhaps haunted by the ghosts of past conquests that she would have return. i like the use of shadow and light. as if the forms in the shadow could become animated and quench the thirst. the word choices are nice throughout...too many for me to point out. i'd have to just copy pretty much the whole thing. a typo...throughout is what you want near the beginning. the part like escaping...not sure what you mean. did you intend light escaping? either way, alll in all its a wonderful piece. very nice.


    • AngelicMistress gold member
      October 4, 2007
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      Jo-el:

      In the part you refer to is that the shadows -mine/all seen-
      throughout the piece are escaping the past..... And then, they can also be in relentless pursuit of me, due to the haunting memories
      -mine- of past shadows..... Hope you understand my meaning.....

      Thanks friend for having taken the time to read and review my work, and enjoying it. Also for your critique.....

      Take care and be blessed with love, light and all things good.....

      Your friend,
      AngelicMistress...Tanya


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 4, 2007

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    Excellent submission for this contest, my angelic friend
    Very well done!
    Wishing you the very best!


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    October 4, 2007

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    You wrote very very well for this contest and I really like what you have written. It really is a very good take from the picture. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

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