The phone rings
My heart skips
I reach out then stop
Can’t look to excited..
The ring sounds again
My Heart speeds.
I pick up the phone
My breath held unknown
You speak
That voice..
..so wonderful
I exhale and smile
So sweet the sound.
My mind stumbles
The first thing in mind
Such feeling and emotion…
...I love you.
Silence on your end
A deep breath
I love you too
A shiver runs down my spine
Skin tingles…
Pure bliss.
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Written for that special someone
Please tell me what you think
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aw so sweet. i know how you feel you did a great job and i am happy for you, just remember to live for the day. dont look to far into that tomorrow. Just live for the moment. and live happy. Lovely write.
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Beautiful!!!
Your heart has given you beautiful words to write. I can feel your love for this person. Your imagery is great. The flow is awesome. Thanks for the read and keep on writing -
I LOVE THIS> it is sooo beautiful.
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I LOVE IT!!!!!
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brings back some memories
I remember listening for that kind of call and you paint a real picture of that. Now I just listen for busines calls. Oh dear, from love to money.
. Rewarded 4
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wow..u just captured all those intense feelings that go by in a second..I like this part...
" I love you
Silence on your end
A deep Breath
I love you too..."
i like the way that it shows how just saying three words can bring all the "tingles" and how its a big leap and how that one brief silence on the other end can seem like an eternity but it's worth the wait -
very good
well. well,
you got the right guy for this poem
i'm a retired bell system installer
so your poem hits home
"the phone rings"
it's true
when you are waiting for a call
it's like the excitment, the relief, goosebumps, etc
it's him, / her
so a perfect verse
"That voice..
..so wonderful"
what a line
i mean, we take so many things for granted as we do with so many other things
we pick up the phone, it works, there's someone on the other end
i mean, how does this thing work
i bring it up only because your work captured the essence of a somewhat inanimate object that comes to life when you pick it up
superb
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very sweet poem. The intense feelings you portray are great
Wonderful write Thanks for sharing!
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aww this was very sweet. I remember it being like that. I hope your relationship with this special person lasts for a long time to come. The only way to make this poem better would be to add...add...and add. I'd like to see more desciption and imagery but this is still very good the way it is
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Very sweet. I think it would benefit some with a little more length, but it is just lovely. I have been there as well... it's an intoxicating feeling.
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