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[ The phone rings ]

The phone rings
My heart skips
I reach out then stop
Can’t look to excited..
The ring sounds again
My Heart speeds.
I pick up the phone
My breath held unknown
You speak
That voice..
      ..so wonderful
I exhale and smile
So sweet the sound.
My mind stumbles
The first thing in mind
Such feeling and emotion…
      ...I love you.
Silence on your end
A deep breath
        I love you too
A shiver runs down my spine
Skin tingles…
Pure bliss.

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Written for that special someone

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  • Hidded Within
    October 4, 2007

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    aw so sweet. i know how you feel you did a great job and i am happy for you, just remember to live for the day. dont look to far into that tomorrow. Just live for the moment. and live happy. Lovely write.


  • kooleyes
    October 4, 2007

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    Beautiful!!!

    Your heart has given you beautiful words to write. I can feel your love for this person. Your imagery is great. The flow is awesome. Thanks for the read and keep on writing

  • ApplexBlossom
    October 4, 2007
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    I LOVE THIS> it is sooo beautiful.

  • ApplexBlossom
    October 4, 2007
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    I LOVE IT!!!!!

  • Judith Chandler
    October 4, 2007

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    brings back some memories

    I remember listening for that kind of call and you paint a real picture of that. Now I just listen for busines calls. Oh dear, from love to money.


  • xXUnnoticed-ScarsxX
    October 4, 2007

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    wow..u just captured all those intense feelings that go by in a second..I like this part...
    " I love you
    Silence on your end
    A deep Breath
    I love you too..."
    i like the way that it shows how just saying three words can bring all the "tingles" and how its a big leap and how that one brief silence on the other end can seem like an eternity but it's worth the wait

  • Francis Vincent
    October 3, 2007

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    very good

    well. well,
    you got the right guy for this poem
    i'm a retired bell system installer
    so your poem hits home
    "the phone rings"
    it's true
    when you are waiting for a call
    it's like the excitment, the relief, goosebumps, etc
    it's him, / her
    so a perfect verse
    "That voice..
    ..so wonderful"
    what a line
    i mean, we take so many things for granted as we do with so many other things
    we pick up the phone, it works, there's someone on the other end
    i mean, how does this thing work
    i bring it up only because your work captured the essence of a somewhat inanimate object that comes to life when you pick it up
    superb




  • Angel Of Heaven99
    October 3, 2007
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    very sweet poem. The intense feelings you portray are great Wonderful write Thanks for sharing!


  • paigers91
    October 3, 2007
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    aww this was very sweet. I remember it being like that. I hope your relationship with this special person lasts for a long time to come. The only way to make this poem better would be to add...add...and add. I'd like to see more desciption and imagery but this is still very good the way it is


  • Tarja
    October 3, 2007
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    Very sweet. I think it would benefit some with a little more length, but it is just lovely. I have been there as well... it's an intoxicating feeling.

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