Deceitful painting lies
Gold dust now blood
Painted an angel next to her dead lover
See her blood stained hands?
Author notes
I hate only having a limited amount of words, but that's why I chose to enter this contest because sometimes it is good to have a limitation to your poetry and sometimes it helps you to think about the way you write and what you really need to include in the poem.
A contest entry
- 20 words; inspired by quote by crimsonfury.
300 points, ended October 6, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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placing the angel by her dead lover is like..wow! such emotion! i understand what you mean about word limitation... you said a lot in few words..excellent!!!
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this culd have major religious implications.
wow
you could have every Catholic in an uproar
good work I'm jealous
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i know what you mean, hey? like sometimes you feel like a word limit restricts your creativity. but then other times its good, because you are able to see which parts are important and trim the excess.
i think you did a great job. your poem is dark, and the question at the end helps to show her guilt rather well. the idea of including an angel in such a dark poem is quite effective.
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