Falling Apart

Too many causes,

Too many excuses,

Never wanting it to work.

Thought you felt the same.

I guess not.

We're just

Falling Apart.

Where'd the love go?

It's evaported,

Just like gasoline

On a hot summer day.

Feeling guilt from it.

You say

Leave me be.

I'm falling apart.

Silence between us.

Has deepend.

Fine just be like that.

Because we have

Fallin' Apart

Already.

Please tell me what you think

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By me, right now

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MahoganyFlow
October 8, 2007

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This is so painful. It was like me reading my own story. You were very expressive and this was a great write!
ellipsist
October 8, 2007
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love that middel stanza especially
I think that is the strength of this piece...
Mrs LadyEnthralling
October 5, 2007

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this was a pretty deep piece her hon and i can just about taste the desires of what this feel like i like your deep writes you do so well with them good job here
esroddo
October 4, 2007

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Such a sad piece
Some times life is hard not what we want it to be. With let downs and disappointments. I could feel you sadness in this write. Wonderfully expressed LISA
Ephiphany
October 4, 2007
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Great choice of words here...wonderful imagery of your feelings.

ephiphany
Clinging-to-Life
October 3, 2007
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Nice work hun. I liked the line
" Where'd the love go?

It's evaported,

Just like gasoline

On a hot summer day."

Thats a very cool comparison, also holds a bit of imagery too it as well. Good Job, your talented and the more you write, the better your poems become
Good job
Pawn-Of-Fate
October 3, 2007
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I can relate to this very well right now, I feel like I now exactly what you mean. excellent work