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Ensepulchred

Stone - henge tears-
of severed hearts-
illuminates love's insomnia.

 


Like internal wounds;
I seep in the name of hemorrhage.

 


I suspended myself
in the diminution of my
breathless senses
and scribbled unto my epitaph

 


"Love encircles enigma"

 


In deep sigh;
I uttered
"All I want is
to love and be loved"

 


I rest my case.

Author notes

Virgoan::
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"Head stone for the broken hearted" - JD

Written October 3, 2007

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  • leander Moderators member
    January 6, 2008

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    With this poem, a feel as if the last line chops it off a bit... but that's only a personal opinion apart from that you did great again with the imagery!
    Leander

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Very nicely done, your images are crisp and clear and the emotion plays well throughout.

    Sorry for not giving those 'real' comments, life is happening just a bit too fast lately.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 6, 2007

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    Excellent write congratulations on the silver trophy I wish you the best of luck in the contest. as well as in your future writes.


  • EvilKate
    October 5, 2007

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    Congrats on a well-deserved placement. This required a few reads - to let it sink deep. Good work!


  • Exodus gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Oh my. I pretty much drooled at your word choices, such a beautiful mastery of language.
    The quotes were a lovely touch, while the simplicity of the last line leaves you feeling a little bit like a deer in headlights.
    I love the accidental focus on the last word of the first three stanzas (at least I'm assuming it's accidental, but given the skill you're showing, I wouldn't be surprised if it's deliberate).
    Thank you, this is just amazing.

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