Lying in the broken bath tub of paint,
Holding on to dreams that were once deemed quaint,
I say it aloud to feel it hurt me again,
Cut so deep the echoes burn like a flame.
“If you were a Lover, you’d never drink,
If you were an Angel, you’d learn to think.”
Freeze my core and severe my will,
Though painful this is, I love you still.
And Angels fall,
And Lovers die,
Our Truth is a wall,
And Cherubs cry.
Cracked black tiles on a gritty floor,
Puddles of hope descend and want it more.
Reflected in the pit of despair,
To love you is a twisted dare.
And when the sky turned grey,
I never looked away,
And hid in your tears of sweet sorrows divine.
I held you close and thanked forever you were mine.
And Angels are insane,
And Lovers bite the dust.
The Absinthe remains,
After Cherubs I lust.
Slowly the starlit face fades,
Eyes closed against this craze.
Bottle breaks and spill my life,
I’d held it tight and clung to strife.
Let these shards show you my love,
Let this body bleed like our black doves.
Let the Angel's wings become lame,
Let it all forget as the Absinthe reigns.
Lovers will bleed,
Like the endless creed.
Dormant feelings that lie entangled,
Cherubs lie about my Absinthe and Angels.
Author notes
This is a poetic preview of my latest novel, also entitled 'Absinthe and Angels'.
When I wrote this, I wrote it with a male in mind, so imagine that, and you'll see what I was aiming at!
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful images. I can see everything.
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I really like this! I honestly could not stop reading it! Very well done!
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The title really has flash, and the images do not fall short. This would work well read aloud.
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wow, thats a great poem...im actually inspired to write now, good job.
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I am speechless. The way the rhyme is, the male thought, all of it is so...
whoa...
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Amazing!
Yet another great piece from you, i really like this one, you can just imagine a dark dingy place empty apart from a bitter man hurt by love (hope this is what you were aiming for) while reading it. Great work my lovely!
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Dawno, This is spectacular. The rhyming, the way you encapsulate the feelings in the stanzas, all merge to create an truly magnificent piece of art. If the novel is as good, I can't wait to read it (I'll go to StoryWrite and check what you have)
THis is My Sister, at her most powerful, grabbing the reader, and leaving with their still beating hearts. Bravo hon.
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Creates such a powerful image.
The novel sounds amazing.
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This is beautiful. I loved the rhythm, the imagery (especially at the beginning), and the overall idea. You're very talented, I look forward to your other work.
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This is so raw, gothic and beautiful. Beautiful to read, flowed off the page and read itself, sad, emotional, deep and meaningful. Love the imagery. Can't wait to read more!
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Oh wow this is amazing. i love how you have the third stanza in this. all this flows very nicely off the page.
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Gothic feeling to this
I like the structure and the recurring angels and lovers. There's an agony about the love here which certainly does happen!
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