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The Fallen's Eden


How has thee fallen?
drowning orbis terrarum
a vehemens tripudio
Like the rain in abundance
Falling towards the earth in wealth
Thou has thane eyes perched up at the heavens above
Casting wrath upon mankind
ortus supremus lucifer in vestri quest
For the sin of thy god

(Chorus)
lacuna redimio mihi...
Ominous heart thy tears departs
Ye old flower drooped upon the sword and the bow
Black as thoust raven eyes and heart
lacuna redimio mihi...
Darkness in all its empty forms
Ye brow wrinkled as time in malice
And warped as thoust refection be


Angry as the tide,fallen from grace
sententia thy penniger pennae es infractus
sweeping away the once proud and sturdy mountains
See how they crumble as your fury collides with the worlds
God’s world thus it doth crash violently

Ye body wrapped Lassoed and chained into place
Into existence by thy soul and tendered flesh
This is now your Luciferious Eden
Weep here or nevermore
Try not to cry as your hate fades into blackness
It shows, oh how it shows

(Chorus)
a vorago redimio mihi...
EGO can’t animadverto vos,
EGO can’t audite vos Operor vos etiam futurus?
Ominous heart thy tears departs
Ye old flower drooped upon the sword and the bow
Black as thoust raven eyes and heart
a vorago redimio mihi...
blackness in all its empty form
Ye brow wrinkled as time in malice
And contorted as thoust reflection be

Horned god thou thinkest
Reperio a via ut dominor , subvertio
Your formerly white wings shattered and shredded
Here your maelstrom is true
Your murmured lips pulled away in grief
Truest is thy form in the hearts and minds of mankind
Mankind whom chose to ignore the light
Like Adam and eve choose to ignore thou warnings
Dead now is their adored Eden

(Chorus)
a inritus redimio mihi...
EGO can’t sentio vos , EGO can’t tactus vos,
Operor vos futurus?
Ominous heart thy tears departs
Ye old flower drooped upon the sword and the bow
Black as thoust raven eyes and heart
a inritus redimio mihi...
shade in all its empty form
Ye brow wrinkled as time in malice
And marring as thoust reflection be...

Spoken:
deus orator vobis...
is said Olympus vel abyssus?
Olympus vel abyssus?
Vos restituo neither...
tunc...vos socius

Once was your skin white and luminescent with god’s hollowed light
Now thy beauty lay before thee
Disfigured, bleeding thy body speakled red and contorted
Thy chains that shall ceaselessly caress thee
Will clutch you in anguish where you shall weep no more
These hooks wrap and hold you by thy flesh
And the raven thy plutonian evil shall keep you
Ask as you may forever …
Nevermore said the plutonian raven tenderly
sententia nunquam magis vadum vos animadverto Olympus
And nevermore shall it be so…


Spoken: The search for thy way to Paradise is eternal... But maybe it is that quest that shall close the gates of the Heavens...

Author notes

Well this was an idea pulled from Theater of tragedy as well as my friends song descendants of Eden. I shall update this i don't think this is finished but I do like this.This is probably going to be a theme song for my character Rebirth like one winged angel is for sepherioth.I was thinking of doing this in latin.These lyrics I found out goes with the song already in existance called Das bose by E nomine it was an accident really.Those who knows E nomine would know its like techno rock with a chorus. For example Rammstein except a bit more techno. here is a link to the song read my poem while rocking to those cool beats to truly experiance it. If you want me to write anymore tell me so because seriously I don't want to write if people don't comment So there is no confusion I choose option 1 so ya.

~~OG

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  • NyteShade
    May 28, 2008

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    This poem-lyrics reminds me a bit of Theater of Tragedy... as it says up on your Authors notes lol but i noticed that before I actually read your notes. A great masterpiece. Well done


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    That was intense. So dark, yet almost... calming, if that makes any sense. I liked how you used sort of "old English" language, added a lot of character to the write. Congratulations on the gold, you deserved it
    Jeanette*~


  • Dark Soul Reaper
    October 25, 2007

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    Wow... that was awesome. I kinda took it more to the Rammstein side of the music then to the techno but it worked so well. I really like this on. Keep up the good work and keep on pennin


  • Bloflggf
    October 5, 2007
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    You obviously put a huge amount of effort into this; my compliments.


    • Audric Beaumont
      October 5, 2007
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      aww thanxs I have been dying to make a poem in old english for the longest time.I just never thought the poem would be about a fallen angel trapped and secured into place by hooks piercing his flesh. Now that I think of it ya thats a fairly creepy subject.

      ~OG

  • Mercury Rising
    October 3, 2007

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    Wow, this is really a tremendous poem with a prophetical old testament quality that is truly quite powerful. The Latin is all Greek to me, but no matter, your poem is outstanding. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.

    David

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