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My man

The man I love,
he loves me too
when he's with me I cant be blue

He's with me
through the good and the bad
Im drowning in his love
the love the others wish they had

he loves me
he loves me not
its hard being here
sitting alone where he is not

you know who you are
the love of my life
and until I see you again
stay away from the knife.

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  • Romantic scribbles
    October 10, 2007

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    wow

    iam really jealous and i do hope that you really do have a man like this in your life if not now then that you will!
    my only suggestion is on line 14 and 15 the transition could be a bit smoother
    otherwise i love it

  • Svengali
    October 5, 2007

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    Wow very passionate

    Wow that guy must be really something. Whether he is a dream or he is real you describe how you feel for him well. It was very good.


  • Kal-El
    October 4, 2007
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    lucky you it's very nice good job


  • Tercil gold member
    October 3, 2007

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    Drowning in love, now that's what I would call dedicated. the poem is very courageous as it doesn't become sickly sweet, just mellow, mild and damn well passionate about one in particular. Very good!