In the world spinning
Rapid thoughts with no beginning
In ways unknown to you
Conclusions misconstrued
In this life span, what is
Good and final, love is
Normal fucks subdued, creating me
Closed off to the world, floating out to sea
Too high, but with no clouds
Impulses scatter, creating my clouds
So many colors no one can see
A rainbow of emptiness made just for me
The life, the love, the joy, the sound
The full fledged decent & meeting the ground
Lightening through the sky couldn't out run
As sheer bliss leaps & skips for fun
Continues the game, within the light hearted
A cruel joke of nature, not sure where it started
Flight meets low as low meets jubilance
Reluctantly I follow, against all consequence
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Silversunshine.. The basics of bipolar disorder... A abstract explination of how I feel at times.
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This is a very good write, and full of emotions. I am glad you wrote about the disorder you suffer from, because I believe poems such as these help others to have some sort of general idea on how people are all different, and have insight as to what they go through on a daily basis and how they feel.
Sometimes I think I am bi-polar because I have my highs and lows, but I'll never truly know but reading your poem it makes me feel for you, because it must be tough.
Thanks for entering & best of luck in my contest
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Great job here...
I, too, suffer from bipolar disorder...this may be abstract, but there may be no other way to explain this illness. Those of US completely get it...
I love this line, dead on, the mania...
"Too high, but with no clouds
Impulses scatter, creating my clouds
So many colors no one can see
A rainbow of emptiness made just for me"
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It has analogies that some probably dont understand, I personaly loved it it made you think and really pay attention to the poem, I say the rhythm also so some people are just on this site to be ugly, the can go to hell...I loved it!
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a little off with the rhyming but what a great poem. the part you talk about a rainbow of colors just for me...when i was in the hospital i kept moving my hand on the painting and in my head the colors would move. i knew it wasn't real but it looked so amazing.
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in some areas the rhyming feels a little off, but when it works it really works :] this is very heart felt and i can feel it. very emotional and strong.
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Thanks for reading it! I'm definatly more of a feeling writer then a gramatically thought out technical writer.. So sometimes it works & sometimes it doesn't! Lol! But whatever comes out is what I go with.. I believe in going with 1st instincts! Thanks for the comments!
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