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"Did you see the moon!?"

Over
the hills
(sun not set)
Itching Evening--
A fat pumpkin
Up in the sky! (Cheddar?)
"No, silly," that's the moon, see
High and round, to tell the time right--
The fields all empty, fallow and faint.

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37 words but I don't think two words will kill you? I can rework if it's a huge issue.

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  • I Dream
    December 16, 2007

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    well i liked it

    but as they said rules are rules

    funny having rules in poetry isnt it ?
    the whole idea of poetry is "breaking the rules" but for your own enjoyment


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    no two extra words wouldn't kill us, they will only kill your chances in the contest...

    thanks for taking the time, maybe a little more and you could have said everything you wanted to with 2 less words... some rules are rules...

    al

  • Cat gold member
    October 4, 2007

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    My thought on the word count is that it makes this contest a bit of an exercise in restraint- i will sometimes choose to enter a word count contest simply because i really have to take my poem down to the bare bones- which i find to be a wonderful exercise.

    so yes- the word count counts here- but poetry is poetry - and i'm glad you were able to find inspiration in the theme and write something sweet like this piece from it.

    m