I try to be myself in this place
but it always tends to be you I have to face.
What I wore today, to you it was a distraction.
I hate when this crap always has to happen.
You always yelling at me,
telling me what to be,
when all I want is just to be me.
Sometimes I wish my life didn't have to happen this way.
I just wish you would kick me out
and then here I wouldn't have to stay.
So just face it.
I'm never going to be another you,
so just let me be me and stop telling me what to do.
And just for the record
the love faded away a long time ago.
So stop lying to me and saying "I love you,"
because right about now
it's a one way street
not two.
A contest entry
- Feel Like No One Cares? [personal contest] by WarmHeartedGeisha.
300 points, ended October 18, 2007, 7 entries
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lovely
I really liked it♥
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very well written
wow, this was really good. i liked the way u ended it as well- mint ending "its a one way street, not two". loved it x
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Thanks. I appreciate the comment.
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"And just for the record
the love faded away a long time ago."
I can really feel the hurt and anger in this piece of writing. Though this one line was the saddest for me. It is heartwrenchingly sad. You did a great job of showing the depth of the emotion. -
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Yea. I was feeling a lot of anger when I wrote this poem. Thank you very much for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
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wow
This is an excellent poem. It flows very well and every line leads you on with more and more emotioin. Great write! Keep it up.
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Thank you. I'm really glad you liked it.
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I noticed you commented many of my poems and I decided to return the favor. The ending in this was very powerful. I love it. Excellent work!
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My ex &I went through this, he changed me a lot, not only how I acted but dressed, &how I ate, &a ton of other stuff about me he thought was a flaw. &Then when we separated, it took time, &its still a working progress on my part 2 find myself again. And u know ur poem also reminds me of my dad. He wants 2 change me 2. And so I can totally relate with this write of urs.
~Lorissa~
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wow sounds like how my mom and I fight
but anypoo nice write
its deep with your feelings
so yes have a *high five* lol
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