My feet become restless from the seat position
They find relief upon the unfolded map
Placed haphazardly on the dashboard
You unroll the drivers side window
I follow your lead and pull out two cigarettes
I hold the wheel, as you feed the flame
The crisp air slips through the cracks
Cradling rosy cheeks and ruby noses
For the first time in months, the heaters on
The mountains draw nearer
I have seen the autumn shades before
But with you, seasons feel meaningful
Our seat belts click open, instant relief
No special location just a beautiful view
The warm colors inviting us into the chill
Gravel covered leaves flutter over the ground
Over fresh, neatly tied tennis shoes
That have touched the city, but not the Earth
You skip a rock across the still lake
The sudden noise seems to startle the trees,
Tired and ready to sleep
I'm gently handed the reddest leaf,
You could uncover before frozen fingers
My favorite color
The wind rolls in to shake the leaves
They scatter like children from school
Teeth begin to chatter loudly
Your hand offers warmth
and time stands still,
For as long as Autumns grip will hold
A contest entry
- Change of Season - 100 entries I'll give out 2050 Points 56 more to go by Florida Sunshine.
625 points, ended October 5, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Take time to move me; by bonjourbunnie.
425 points, ended October 6, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Fall In Love by piccola.
1000 points, ended October 14, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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nicely writen thank you for your effort and your entry
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"I have seen the autumn shades before
But with you, seasons feel meaningful"
Love has this habit of making ordinary things seem extraordinary. Thats why it is one of my favorite things to share with people.
Thank you for this wonderful poem. Good luck in the contest. : -
wow what a great story this tells. this flowed so smoothly and was full of all the right stuff
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Baby, this reminds me of our winding trip through the mountains last spring! That was an amazing trip! And it also makes me anticipate our trip for this fall! I can't wait! Your images are perfect in capturing soft quiet moments! And the skipping of the rock! You captured that intricate skill in just the right moment! This is perfection to me! Just like you!
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EXCELLENT job ~ I thoroughly enjoyed reading this~
Thanks for entering my season contest ~ good luck to you!
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Everything you post is amazing! There are so many beautiful moments in this poem I could NEVER pick a favorite part. The way your words flow out of you is just a sight to behold. Free verse is so difficult to write smoothly, a lot of the time it ends up choppy, but your writing just seems effortless! I love the title, and the way you fit it in to the poem! You deserve gold for sure!
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Oh My Gosh
after I read this I almost want to put my pen down - unbeliable! fantastic! you are extremely talented and this poem is sure to win gold!
fav line:
You skip a rock across the still lake
The sudden noise seems to startle the trees,
Tired and ready to sleep
great read!
Carly Pop
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