I grab your hand,
i hold on tight,
the very last chance,
the very last night.
To tell you everything,
that ive never said,
get my thoughts out,
clear up my head.
I dont know if you loved me
i just assume you did,
You were there for me when i was scared,
and all those times i hid.
So this is it,
the last goodbye,
i always loved you,
please dont cry...
A contest entry
- Take time to move me; by bonjourbunnie.
425 points, ended October 6, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - one last time. by crimsonfury.
300 points, ended October 10, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is very very sad. I love the rhyme here too. It is deep and flows really well. Keep writing. You are good.
All the best
Wayne
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i think that most readers could identify with this poem. there are always things that we wish we'd said. we never know when it will be our last chance.
the ending was nice, a fitting conclusion to your poem. my least favourite stanza was the second one, but i liked the third stanza, how love is merely assumed.
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It's absolutely beautiful....**tears in eyes**
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So sweet and sorrowful. I really enjoyed the ellusiveness of it, almost as if you didn't want the subject to know you were writing about them. Good luck!
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wow
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Nice write and sad indeed, i almost cried when reading it
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