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Pond's Silence

Clinging as a
leaf does
on the verge of leaving
the rose

aside my lover
who
I thought loved me...

caught by the waiting pond
drops the leaf
in sounds spoken shy

so like our love that
quietly ended




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  • Tempa Lee
    October 21, 2007

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    wow!!!!!!!!! short and sweet and i really do LOVE IT. what family would you like to be?


    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Dani~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


    • Aurielle
      October 21, 2007
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      your sis!!! I wish I neva replied lol...now u know who I am lol


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 8, 2007

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    THIS WAS ABSULUTELY SHORT AND SO SADLY SWEET!!

    this was the first poem that I read so far and you blew me away!!!!
    I LOVED THIS.....
    I LOVED HOW YOU COMPARE A LEAF OF A FLOWER TO YOUR LOVE.....
    I LOVED THE ENTIRE THING AND THE ENDING WAS BEAUTIFUL AND HEARTBRAKING!!!!!!
    EXCELLENT!!!!
    THESE ARE THE POEMS I LIKE TO SEE.....
    YOU ARE MOST DEFINATELY IN MY FINALIST LIST NOW!!!!!
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    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS WONDERFUL PIECE INTO MY CONTEST!!!!!!!-----
    WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
    AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    XxLisaJazminexX

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    Aww, this was so beautiful yet so sad. I can relate to this one. I liked the idea of "silence" compared to a falling leaf. Lovely write

  • Excul
    October 8, 2007
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    wow. This is pretty sad, yet deep! Great job. I loved the last two lines and first two lines.

  • Liquid memories
    October 7, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwww so sad, like a falling leaf. that is made worst by the silence that follows. Thanks so much for sharing. :"f


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    October 3, 2007

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    This is really a great piece.
    Wonderful here and thanks for
    sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826

  • Liquid memories
    October 3, 2007
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    deeply felt emotions, very nice. and the title, is perfect. picture of a pond would make it complete. thanks for sharing.

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