When the night is dark and the moon is on the wane
And the words once spoken only ashes after the flame
Where the distance travelled is marked upon a soul
A road further on beyond the love we used to hold
I'm wearin' an old striped suit with it's sleeves threadbare
Holes in my old brown shoes tied with twine and flair
I got my voice to sing a hallelujah song
On this road further on where the dead belong
A road further on
Beyond this life I once knew
Where the night wears on
Just like my old brown shoes
A road further on
Beyond all hope and care
Maybe we'll meet up again
Someday we'll all be there...
I've seen the setting sun across the desert dunes
Watched the moon rise up just like a gold balloon
I've looked for signs above the thunder clouds that roll
I've felt the fires burn deep down in my jaded soul
A road further on
Beyond this life I once knew
Where the night wears on
Just like my old brown shoes
A road further on
Beyond all hope and care
Maybe we'll meet up again
Someday we'll all be there...
Now my time is coming to an end
I feel it fadin' in my bones again
I'm bein' called homeward bound
No more time here to mess about
A road further on
Beyond this one I knew before
I'm bein' called back home
I've finally had enough; no more
A road further on
Beyond this life I once knew
Where the night wears on
Just like my old brown shoes
A road further on
Beyond all hope and care
Maybe we'll meet up again
Someday we'll all be there...
A contest entry
- Let's Get Lyrical! by Turtledove.
550 points, ended October 18, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Bend in the Road by second-born.
500 points, ended November 10, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is amazing. It really was meant to be a song. I can almost hear it as I read it. I especially loved the first to stanzas and I liked the way you carried the brown shoes throughout the whole song. Thanks for your entry!
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I liked this a lot…I also love to write lyrics and this ballad of yours seems to have a positive melody…I love the chorus and I can almost hear the song itself…thank you for sharing a very fantastic write!!!
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Excellent
Appears to be a "madrigal"; I think. LOL. But it is a good write whatever form it is. Singability is the most important thing; that and scoring it. Good luck in my contest. Walt.
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