When I close my eyes
orange beads from our Savers trip
are often wet between my lips
as my tongue so slightly slips
and twists around you.
Author notes
"Savers" is an op shop, for those that mayn't know.
A contest entry
- seduction by Leslie.
525 points, ended October 16, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow. Breathtaking.. again. This sense of indulgence and total sensual absorption just makes me shiver. You really know these things it seems.
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Thank you for entering my contest!
its a simple scene, a moment, an exchange. a sync of words and life.
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I absolutely loved this. One of the few short pieces that's left me, basically, speechless. Wonderful job.
. Rewarded 4
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So I have this dilemma with this piece, I don’t know if this is a totally innocent piece written by you, perhaps not aware of what the contest was about, which could happen, or this is perhaps exactly what I was looking for, a piece that shows sensuality but not obvious which I dig very much, a tons of not so innocent images went through my mind as I though in pearls, I’m sorry getting to graphical here…. !!! ummm thanks for this very well elaborated piece.
Thanks for your entry.
Leslie
. Rewarded 8
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Wow... so simple but says so much!! I thought this was very sensual!
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