Trapped inside
this cold, dark cage,
filled with guilt
and chained by rage.
Held down by the bonds
of each sadistic thought,
a prisoner of my own mind,
laying alone as I rot.
A contest entry
- Make me feel... by xTomorrowx.
600 points, ended October 9, 2007, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique?
Comments
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this is a dark write which holds both emotions and imagery and is powerfully written
you can really feel it as you read it
congrats on the honary
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Wow, what a dark write! Great imagery and metaphors! I love how you aligned the lines!
Congrats on the HM, and thank you for sharing in the group Freed By a Verse!
Always,
Cassie
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Wow, what a dark write! Great imagery and metaphors! I love how you aligned the lines!
Congrats on the HM, and thank you for sharing in the group Freed By a Verse!
Always,
Cassie
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short, but to the point, i love it personally =)
great write! it really is a great poem... well done =)
thanks for entering my contest and good luck! =)
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