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The Cheater's Vision

He takes tiny, fragile steps to proloing the view out of the corner of his eye. 

 

Stepping as if the asphalt was made of glass to witness the sea of

 

mini-skirts and creeping up crop tops. No one more grateful than him for Summer's

 

arrival.  An expert in REM, the eyes move in slo-mo jumping jack fashion at every

 

bounce of a female's passing step. Mouth drooling at the sight of her legs:

 

legs he didn't propose to, legs that didn't meet him at the aisle, legs that didn't

 

bear the weight of his children, legs that didn't belong to his wife.

Author notes

I wrote this a few years back after a confession of cheating (not by me). I'm not a man but I think this is possibly what goes through the minds of some.

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  • alaskanamber
    February 14, 2008

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    This reminds me of an essay I studied my womens lit class. It is called "Girls in Their Summer Dresses". It's all about the emotions the wife feels about her husbands cheating eyes. I can relate to this feeling as many woman can. In our hearts we worry that they will always find something better down the road. And the men always claim that they are "just looking". Wonderful imagery also. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • love my jose luis
    December 21, 2007

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    I like that you could write what you think that other people maybe think. It's hard to put yourself into someone else's mind and I really like that you could do it so well to make a great poem.
    ~Alix


    • Celinda Luna
      December 30, 2007
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      thanks so much!

      I find it kinda of easy, being unpopular, in the background of things, etc. I´m out of town so sorry for the delay. Many thanks.


  • sistabigbones
    October 3, 2007
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    like it a lot

    this inspired me to write, I like the idea of comparing her (the 'other woman') to his wife, their legs, one tanned, toned and smooth, his wife's with cellulite most likely from child birth, long days at work. I like this. I would run with it but I know I'd get stuck. I don't know this well enough.