We lay in stillness
Watching an empty sky;
Our hands inches apart.
We laughed in shimmer fragments
And past recollections
Of flaxen summers.
We witnessed love
Like fleeting butterfly kisses
In that shady hideaway.
We searched for the truth
In aching eyes,
But it eluded us.
The evanescent summertime
Left our dusty hearts
Under the cherry tree.
A contest entry
- Love. (Prewrites welcome) by Coloured Skies.
600 points, ended February 3, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The truth is often hardest to find in those we do not really love, whenever there is doubt it is best to remember only the good times and not to dwell on the bad lest we realise the imperfections.
Thankfully age has it's advantage of learning from past mistakes,(yet still we make them in the name of love). -
"Like fleeting butterfly kisses"
Lol I also mention butterfly kisses!
Burn burn!
This is just frikken beautiful. Tantilizing stuff. Your ending was captivating! Totally heart rendering
Definitely a soft sadness hidden in the words.
Congrats
You Rock
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thankyouu ^-^
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A beautifun sencioud poem. Well written. I loved it.
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this poem is beautiful, i wish i could write feelings like this, it is such a beautifully flowing expression of words, well done and keep writing
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ooooooh oh goodness your poetry is nifty!
also the shade of red you chose for this font - so perfect.
Please keep writing; your stuff is wonderful and original and uniquely you!!
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thanx =]
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wonderful
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A poem like a gentle breeze ...
recollecting seasons. Well done, Precious.
Love
Myra
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thankuuuu >_<
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lovely,
great imagery!
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thankuuuu >_<
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WOW DAT WAS SO KOOL HOW U INCHED THE CHERRY TREE IN THERE lol ^.^ its cute keep it up and i added u as meh fav to let u kno ^.~
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I'm back to read this one again
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lol not bored of it yet?
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I really enjoyed this! The imagery is amazing. Good job!
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Amazing imagery! I really enjoyed this. I wish I could write like this!
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haha i bet you cld =]
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heart warming poem making a change from the cold blooded blow from the suicide shout. But amazing none the less, I need to be reading more fo these I have been thrown nothing but bloody girls and heart broken guy poems and this makes a wonderful change. Again drawn to this poem but thats because of the word cherry tree, nothing but love unless there is a hangmans noose invloved can happen.
TK
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haha yes my writing has been less morbid lately =] guess ive been writing when im in good moods lol
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this is beautifull.
I love poems like this as i cant write them myself.
Thanx for the comment too -
ahhhh no!!!
Hoped for a big smooch!
Lovely poem!!! I can relate with the feeling; "We searched for the truth
In aching eyes,
But it eluded us." , suppose that is why I love it!
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Wow, that was amazing. Beautiful words.
And thanks for comment.
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