"I love the Rain" She whispered quietly
when woken up by the sound
of heavy raindrops
falling onto a tin rooftop
Which inevitably brought to mind
happier moments in time, now past...
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Gentle showers or thunder storms
all with the same purpose
to wash the earth clean
sounds soothed and cradled by many
lulling her to a restful sleep
where nightmares didn't dare intrude...
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Rain like teardrops falling from clouds eyes
memorys replayed as they always did
you could hear her melancholy sighs
echoing from her soul so blue
appreciated the clouds teardrops
as they always helped to hide her own...
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No longer able to immerse herself in the wonder
teasing her with his presence
dancing so vividly in her mind
why does she have to feel so alone
comforted by the warmth of her blanket
tears falling as rapidly as the rain outside
eyes locked on wet trees swaying in the breeze...
~-~-~
Softly falling rain
now starting to let up
falling into a drizzle now
that would soon be a light mist
and then just a faded memory...
- Theres Something Sexy About the Rain group list • next in list
A contest entry
- - Vignettes - by AJ Morelli.
3500 points, ended October 30, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything goes. by warrior-eagle.
600 points, ended October 3, 2007, 50 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this has some strong possibilities - i really like the theme of rain carried through out- The piece could have been strengthened by the use of imagery (something other than rain images) you've told us its raining and we get that.. but now.. take us to the next level
when the rain hit the rooftop what did it sound like
the heavy march of tin soldiers?
cats clammoring on a tin roof?
see what i mean?-
you inadvertently stumbled upon one of my other pet peeves on this site- entering another contest before this piece has been judged in my contest- oy.
a very nice effort here- i appreciate your entry
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thank you for such a fine effort and entry here...
al -
I find this to be a very beautiful poem. I'm SO glad that you won this contest.
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this makes me realize how much i miss the rain back east because it never rains in southern california
beautifully done, that's why it wears gold 
congrats. be well and be blessed
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Thank you so much for your kind words
I know exactly how you feel...
I love the rain...
the sound,the smell
just adore it totally...
I live on the east coast
and when it rains i am so happy
the funny thing is that when i was going to get married to my husband
i told everyone i hoped that it would rain
they thought i was crazy
but i loved the rain so much i just hoped it did
and it did as my outdoor cerimony went on...
wish you the best...
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why does she have to feel so alone
comforted by the warmth of her blanket
tears falling as rapidly as the rain outside
eyes locked on wet trees swaying in the breeze...
I've done that many times.And gone out when there have been thunderstorms.the rain is soothing to me since it is God sent.anyhow this is a great poem. -
wow! it's creepy how much this relates to me. I love the rain so much and i go crazy over thunder storms. Rain is like therapy to me. you wrote this beautifully. I love the ending. Wish you the best of luck in the contest. I really hope you win.
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