Water ripples outward
Forever to expand
Blurring wolf and woman
Blurring sky and land
They run as one together
Their hearts forever twined
The forest as their shelter
Always side by side
They creep amongst the water
They creep amongst the trees
They creep into our caged souls
For all the world to see
We are the ladies of the court
And the wolves of darkened woods
May our hearts beat in time together
As they always should
Author notes
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Remembered again! Hopefully this will be enough, that way you can finally close the contest and decide already!
A contest entry
- Picture Perfect by Narcissus In Chains.
700 points, ended November 13, 2007, 16 entries
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This one is excellent. I think the "they creep" repetition worked for you well here too. Vivid imagery and becoming of the wolf. Yes, I do like this alot :D
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Hmmm.... I'm not sure what to make of it. Part of me loves it while another is just eh. I do like the beginning, but it seems to be missing something again, or maybe my wolf is just being more picky about this piece. I do like the lines:
They creep into our caged souls
For all the world to see.
It reminds me of a wolf soul trapped in a human body for some reason. -
wow!
really good write!!!!!
good luck
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better than anything i have written. i love it.
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bravo!
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