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Sanitized (Expurgated Version)

Teachers blast censors,
cite bowdlerized Bradbury,
gosh durn book burners

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So in CA at the school I went to we studied Bradbury's Fahrenheit 451. Only we studied from a censored version. Oh, the irony.

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  • Naridill
    January 13, 2008

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    lol - I love that ending - its brilliant and just simply written perfectly. Nicely done, thanks for sharing.


  • Salt Therapy
    January 13, 2008

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    Hahaha. How funny. I hate censorship. It's the assassination of an idea. And it hides the world for what it really is. People will remain ignorant to it if they cannot see it. Great poem. ~ Kerri

  • laxrocks33
    January 12, 2008

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    I loved how beautifully strange this piece was, especially with the obscurity of the word "bowdlerized." I would agree that "gosh durn" takes away from the powerful ironic effect of the overall poem, so if you're okay with it, I would suggest altering that phrase. Regardless, very good thought-provoking work, feel free to take a look at some of my poetry if you get the chance. Thanks.

  • unt1tled
    January 12, 2008
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    This made me laugh out loud. My copy of Farenheit 451 when I read it actually had a little article by Bradbury at the end about the censoring of it in CA. A great tribute to a great book. My only critique is that the "gosh durn" in is a little awkward... as others have said, maybe it was meant to be. Great write!


  • any1
    January 11, 2008

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    LOL. I just watched the movie which I suppose was also censored. It was a sad commentary on society. Why do we still have to read the same old things...after all these years?


  • Delicate Fire Water
    January 7, 2008

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    I like this and I'm glad you manageed to put experience into this. Keep up the good work, and I hope to be reading more of your writes soon,

    All the best,

    ~Stephi-Dawne~


  • Perception
    January 7, 2008

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    hmmm... This is interesting. Leaves you thinking. I like these small little lines, but it just didn't seem to have any flow - it just seemed to say what it had to say. Simple as possible.

    Great job though!


  • dead-love-for-fun
    January 6, 2008
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    This poem rocks

  • Andro
    January 2, 2008

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    Quite a marvelous little senryu - few words wielded expertly like a keen dagger blade. And you definitely earn major kudos for 'bowdlerized' - a term I haven't heard in ages.

    On a minutely critical note, while I suspect 3rd line was intended to be a jab at the sad, sad state of illiteracy in US, seeing the well-written poem missing interpunction still made me cringe. If it was intentional, I shan't force your muse but if it was an accident, do 'period' it?

  • SueRee
    December 28, 2007

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    Good

    Hooray! There are still minds who want the unedited, non-condensed, complete, whole and unabridged version of books and their ideas. And you said it all in a much cooler, less preachy way than I just did!

  • tornn2
    October 21, 2007

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    nice job

    personally, i like the last line. it goes very well with what you're trying to say. I've never studied Bradbury, but I'm guessing it is something that the school deemed inappropriate.


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    October 8, 2007
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    wow

    Now this is a mighty powerful Haiku! I really loved how passionate you are in your wording through out this haiku. I will not even begin to understand what exactly the difference betwene the censored and uncensored but judgin by your violent action wording... I would say its a massive difference. any ways very well penned and kepe on penning away.


  • wiccanway
    October 3, 2007

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    how can they teach a thing like bradbury from a CENSORED book!!
    i like the write, but personally i would go stronger with the last line.

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