The man in moon sings me tune.As the dolphins jump and play.And the smooth smooth ocean all it does is sway.The mysterious girl that comes up every night from the sea below plays her flute so gentle so slow. And the the shining stars stop twinkling they just start listening.as I'm staring at this magnificent site from my little boat the girl sees me and yells "come over here and enjoy with us the nights magical spells.I listened to the girls beautiful song thats all you could here nothing else not a peep and i slowly in my little boat fell fast asleep.
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under - Prewrite Heaven 2 by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended December 7, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fairies and all enchanted beings~~ For kids to age 13 by Emerald Lass.
475 points, ended January 22, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the kids 13 and younger: Anything to cheer me! by Sky Prince Ireland.
300 points, ended January 20, 2008, 31 entries
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Awwww, this is adorable. It makes me think of fairies and magic and wonderland. Perhaps you should write it like a poem in lines that rhyme, it's a little hard for me to read. But it was well worth the effort! Best wishes in the contest
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This is beautiful! Always make sure to put spaces between your sentences! Keep writing and good luck in the contest!
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Beautiful! Magical and everything. Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck.
Brian -
This is a wonderful story, so filled with enchantment.
You might do your poems in just one line for each sentence:
The man in the moon sings me a tune
as dolphins jump and play
and the smooth ocean , all it does is sway.
See? Like that.
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Great imagery to this piece. I would change the formating a little so that it reads more like a poem instead of a story, but the beauty of it is great. Lovely job here
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AWESOME!!!!
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