Why do you call me sugar?
Buy a dictionary.
I own three.
Are you saying
I知 sweet?
I知 saying you question
too much.
Never.
I知 saying you love
too thoughtfully.
Bullshit.
I知 saying I知 sweet
on you, and you make me
sweet.
You池e all words.
I知 saying
you taste good.
I壇 rather you loved me
with your mind
than your tongue.
My tongue is freer.
And your mind is more
confection.
And why do you call me
sacchar?
Buy an encyclopedia.
Author notes
Something light to tickle your fancy. Be honest with what you think - I'm a big strong girl, I can take it.
This is still a baby - please help me teach it to walk.
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Brilliant!
I absolutely love dialogue poetry, but it has to be clever. Well clever this certainly is!
And I imagine it has just about every woman who reads it pounding a fist in the air, and every man nervous.
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Haha, I sure hope so.
Thank you!
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"I’d rather you loved me
with your mind
than your tongue."
I really agree with this stanza. So many guys think with there body instead of there soul. I like the humor and dialogue in this poem very clever! -
It's really cute. It took me a couple lines to figure the conversation form, (maybe I'm just a little slow) but it made me smile. I also like the smooth sarcasm in person A.
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I agree with everyone who commented before me. I made me laugh at the end because i wasnt expecting this kind of read. I love the conversation form that you have used. I like the sarcasm used here which is very humourous and funny. This is very easy to read and has a nice flow caused by the structure you used to present this fantastic piece. WEll done
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I definately love the way you have written this in conversation form
It's something I don't come across with that much on here and I do like the unique feel it gives when reading
There are also a lot of feelings captured within the words, the emotions one feel with the very first, little discussion in a relationship at least, that's how it felt for me
Very well done, absolutely enjoyed this
Leander
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This is very original I couldn't help smile while reading this, its good to read something as fresh.Well done!
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i knew i knew what sacchar meant!!! but yeah i had to look it up before i remembered i knew. so i didn't know. but great way to end it. it seems a little too much like a paragraph to me, but i am guilty of that myself so i don't have much right to criticize. i like the part "with your mind/than your tongue" a lot. it's not really that complex or thought-provoking but it makes great sense
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Haha, good old Latin roots. I agree this isn't the most complex poem I've written - it's more of just a fun piece. Glad you liked it.
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