Hi, My name is Anorexia Nervosa
I make girls sickeningly thin,
I make them look really pale,
I make them very ill.
I am the one who says you are fat,
When you are really not.
I am the one who eats and then
Throws it all back up again.
I am the one who goes without food
For days on end.
Be careful when you mess with me,
I will ruin you!
Everyone will notice your changes,
dark circles under your eyes,
Skeleton thin,
Hardly any voice,
No energy...
Baggy clothes all the time...
Not eating with the crowd,
No eating at all...
Be careful, I cause death in many cases...
Don't mess with me!
I make girls think they are fat,
No matter how skinny they are
I completely change their outlook
And can eventually kill you!
Author notes
My friend showed me a poem about Crystal meth, and it inspired me to write one about anorexia. and did you know that 1 in every 18 guys is anorexic? statistics are higher than that with girls, and getting even higher! Help me do something to stop it!
A contest entry
- Maybe when I wake up, it won't hurt anymore... by Avalanche.Echo.
375 points, ended November 16, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dynamic Thoughts & Deep Emotions by DragonBlue.
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So strange what we do to ourselves...
we really are our own worst enemy lass...
reminded me of those old anti smoking ads where the cigarette is talking...saying it'll get ya....
very very good work here little gypsy....
you made this all to real....
so many facets to the human mind.....
excellent poetic social commentary...
Don't change a thing.
Bless your heart lass,
Liam
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Thank you so very much for your comment.
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Dear Miss Nervosa,
Would you please come and visit me as I am currently far too friendly with Mr Greedy who encourages me to eat and drink far too much.
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No, you don't need to start starving even if you are gaining too much weight... trust me, a good diet and exercise will help you out.
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well after reading this poem penn i will say why are you so skinny? with clapping poetty lol do not be shy, if you like a poem then bloody well clap it and some clappies might come back to you
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Thanks I'm not as skinny now as I was when I wrote this one... I have gained a lot of weight, but then again... I had a kid, so of course I gained weight lol. Thanks again
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Thanks I'm not as skinny now as I was when I wrote this one... I have gained a lot of weight, but then again... I had a kid, so of course I gained weight lol. Thanks again
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Thank you for your entry to my contest!
Blessed Be~
)O(
DragonBlue
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wow this is really good...wow im speechless...
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thanks
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np
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This is a very very huge topic among people especially teens. It's very powerful and in your face and that's why I like it. It's meaning is very good also. Very well done!
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Omg! this says so much!
I love what you did with it!
I've read things like this and you've done really really well depicting a horrible disease.
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Wow! This is a powerful poem on a very important topic. You have done a nice job with this, and hopefully it can help make more people aware of just how common this disease is. So many suffer horribly with this, and my heart breaks for them. Blessings, Patty
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Thank you.
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Wasn't quite sure what you meant by "Makes me hungry", your comment on my "Sweet Sweet Rachel". Just read your poem about anorexia and kind of get it. Anorexia was mainly a major problem among teenage girls I thought, although Karen Carpenter was in her thirties I think when she died from the disease. Congratulations, you have done a great job on the subject. I didn't know guys suffered from anorexia more than girls. But then I can see how that would make sense. Once again, congratulations! A job well done.
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I don't remember writing "makes me hungry" in a comment on your poem... um... byut yeah.... I think the statistics say that every 1 in 18 guys suffers anorexia... it may be more than that, but I don't remember. The main reason I have such a good insight of anorexia is because I went through it...
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Wasn't quite sure what you meant by "Makes me hungry", your comment on my "Sweet Sweet Rachel". Just read your poem about anorexia and kind of get it. Anorexia was mainly a major problem among teenage girls I thought, although Karen Carpenter was in her thirties I think when she died from the disease. Congratulations, you have done a great job on the subject. I didn't know guys suffered from anorexia more than girls. But then I can see how that would make sense. Once again, congratulations! A job well done.
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bravo!
wow, this is a powerful poem, A nice take on a painfully dangerous and common disease.
I love that you personify anorexia as a person, makes the message hit harder and makes it more relatable
well done
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This hit home because I had issues with this during my school life. Also I noticed a lot of my friends experience this too. I thought that this poem took place in front of a mirror. The girl/guys ideas while looking at theirself and hating the image they see. Anorexia does ruin people's lives. Beautiful write, so true.
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wow hon this is really a great poem you nailed the topic and the drug f skinny very perfectly great job
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Yup yup...great poem!!So tue
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Good graphic write from the POV of the disease. Great social write to alert others of this dangerous disease.
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A useful warning in verse
I like social issue presentations and this one is well presented and arresting.
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I don't think it flowed very well, and like others have said, you have some facts mixed up.
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I'm glad that this poem was more realistic and factual about anorixia nervosa. Many people have misconceptions about the disease, but you seem to understand it well enough.
One thing is (and I know you understand this already because you wrote it in your author notes), but men are affected by the disease as well. Yet, throughout the poem, you only discuss how it makes "girls" think they are fat, and it makes "girls" look sickeningly thin.
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Not a bad poem, very literal and a bit confused in one area as to bulimia and anorexia, but good on you for spreading awareness about it.
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actually... some anorexics... when they are FORCED to eat, they go and throw it back up... it is part of both disorders...
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"I am the one who says you are fat,
When you are really not.
I am the one who eats and then
Throws it all back up again.
I am the one who goes without food
For days on end."
Technically it's not.. That's bulimia. Two separate diseases.
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This poem reminds me of a friend I have :[ She had a problem with it for a while. I really like this though. This is what I liked most:
That the narrator was Anorexia. That added to the meaning and message. Very powerful.
"Be careful when you mess with me,
I will ruin you!
Everyone will notice your changes,
dark circles under your eyes,
Skeleton thin,
Hardly any voice,
No energy..."
I like your description of the disease and the changes you will undergo. I also like the fact that Anorexia is talking down about itself.
Your poem is great and sends a great message. Poems like this should be taught in school lol
Great job.
-Lily♥
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wow this is such an amazing poem,
i really understand where your coming from here,
it just simply amazing, your form,
and the hidden meaning are so clear and breath-taking,
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A wonderful point of view analysis. Well done, you explain exactly what the eating disorder is and does! You should be very proud of this piece!
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i think it is really important to raise awareness about eating disorders, and i have pasted in my profile a few statistics and a message to help, good poem and important topic.
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I do like this but not really for this contest, I'm wanting supporting ideas and better ways to keep it up but i do like this because it shows the down fall. However its not a disorder or illness its a lifestyle that you choose. Its your choice, You can choose to be healthy and normal or beyond normal and so much better, you can be the one everyone wants to be like and wants to look like. but thats my view and i fully understand your view as well, I love your view I'm gonna keep it in my contest so those who are struggling with it can see if they really want to continue with this.
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Ntgagatf:
"I do like this but not really for this contest, I'm wanting supporting ideas and better ways to keep it up but i do like this because it shows the down fall. However its not a disorder or illness its a lifestyle that you choose."
It is an illness.. It is NOT a choice. God do your fuckin' research. If it weren't a disorder/illness, why would people be hospitalized for it? (Either in a mental hospital or because they made themselves so sick their bodies fail?) If it weren't a disorder, why would it be called an EATING DISORDER?
If you're going to say something, please don't make yourself look like an idiot: "Better to say nothing and appear stupid than to open your mouth and prove that you are."
And for that matter, the rest of your comment: are you saying those who are anorexic are "beyond normal" and what everyone wants to be like? Are you SICK? Being thin and bones is NOT what everyone wants to be like. It's unhealthy! And not that attractive.
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wow sad but nice write.
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hey crime I dont think that i would have came out and said hi my name is Anorexia Nervosa unless you are referring Anorexia to be a person i would have just drescribed and then mabe at the end said my name is Anorexia nice to meet cha or something you see me but where is the methaphore and similes
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A good message. You might like a poem I wrote with a similar message. It is called 'Assimilate'. Keep writing!
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Wow
I have read 5 poems today and all of them were completely bad. Now, after i read your poem i got really happy. I like it a lot!
There is a very good rhythm, the words are structured and the message goes straight to the point. I totally like your style and i'll keep reading your poems.
There was only one thing i didn't like, and critics are good for people to grow, even though your style of writing is incredible. This tiny problem is the ending. II think you could have finished with something more attractive than: "I make even guys sick". But this is a minimal problem in my opinion.
For all these things i'll give you 2 applauses. Congrats!
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Full of blunt honesty, this is. Very nicely written. A lot of girls that struggle with self-esteem issues should read this. In the beginning, anorexia may seem like their savior, but in the end it's not worth it. Good job!
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Wow. This was well-written and truthful. I liked how you incorporated bulimia in there as well; they're often hand in hand.
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So sad indeed
Its such a shame that people cant except people as they are . In school when kids make fun of each other it is so sad for they want to fit in so bad but the way people treat them they begin to feel their is something wrong with them . On the contrary if people dont like the way you are then they dont know what a grand person you are .Be yourself and be happy for in this huge world you will never please everyone but you can always please yourself and you are the one that truly counts
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this is great and i can relate to this as u know from reading some of my stuff...and i fully agree, it can and will ruin your life, possible end it... i'm more or less mia rather than ana... but i do both... and it really does mess you in all different ways, looks, personality, and your intrest... so i'm glad u worte this, its a great warning! great job, keep up the good work!
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Love
LOVED!!!
You write beautiful poetry
You're amazing =]
Keep up the work
<3Liz
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i liked this poem alot it was an awesome write keep it up
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I think I know the poem you're talking about, it's a very powerful poem. I think this could use a little more after the third stanza, but it is still very well written. Good job!
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Thank you. I'm going to add some more soon... I just don't know what to write...
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one aspect I would've liked to see is the fact that, you think you're fat and ugly no matter how many ppl tell you that you're skinny
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I can put that in there... I'll see what I can come up wtih doing that.
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*sighs* Good poem.
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Thanks.
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