audibly speechless this exchange of
daily measured glances;
intrinsically entrancing
sings the Anywhere girl.
“who are you, my Lovely?”
want to know, hungry to know
leilani found
a-drift in
phosphorescent mediums
whispered words of sweet embitterment
tracing the curves and silhouettes
syllables tip-tap tripping off the tongue
to read you
-a furious and salivary kiss-
oh,
i am utterly moved by you, simply you
and
i am left forcibly
ellipsised
In a list
- Poems that have a special meaning to me, none of your business why (perhaps because I'm an ego maniac with delusions of grandeur & a god complex?) • next in list
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A contest entry
- Meaningful Personal Connections - points increased! by ellipsist.
3150 points, ended October 24, 2007, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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sweet
I love "intrinsically entrancing" this whole thing sounds like a dream, that you barely remembered pieces of, tiny vivid visions. no constrictive criticism, just Awe
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great use of language and some excellent attention to sound
a pleasure to stumble upon
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The first verse is what caught my eye as well. WOW! great piece of writing here. very abstract and yet, I aught the meaning easily. Way to go. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
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I can hear the percussion and then the simmer of a long lost horn finding its way through the rythmns until there bursts the cry in a hurt brass crash. Nicely done.
Peace & Love, Tom B.
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I am flattered, indeed, by this entry... the thoughts expressed are done in a somewhat abstract but no less expressive way... there is a clarity to these thoughts and I love the creative wording and imagery, and, of course, that it seems to be about me (I admit it, I'm sorry...) I consider this piece quite a high compliment and am touched that you have entered it into this contest... thank you! 
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way cool!
good luck in the contest
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i really like the first stanza- well, i like all of it, but for some reason the first stanza really caught my attention, especially the end of it "sings the Anywhere girl." just has a lovely ring to it. nice write, as usual
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Wow...good luck in the contest
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