Her Poignant Presence
silences my soul.
She laughs,
I am infatuated.
She cries,
and I bow at her sole.
She is an Epic
and I,
a haiku
and nothing more.
She is Earth,
and Heaven
and All -that is in between.
She is God,
and I am but a humble whore...
Author notes
it is love?
A contest entry
- what is lovely never dies by Nicolette.
1000 points, ended October 7, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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humbly whole
Tamara
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What is lovely never deis and u shall never die too...
this is love and love st first sight... lol and it kinda reminded me of the song "what if god was one of us".....
i bend before such genius.... such muse...
PEACE
********JOWELL********
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I love the play on the word "sole" (soul) here. I don't know if that was intentional or not but it was effective. To bow at someones feet or their soul, to humble ourselves in the light of another's love...Well done and good luck in the contest.
~Lyrical
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the "sole" word here is intended of course.
Thanks for the beautiful words.
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Seems like love to me if you don't mind being the "whore"... but even God "loved" the whores and had mercy on them, lol! Very interesting analogy here - I enjoyed this. The poem spills nicely down the page and has an effective structure. I liked the 3rd (middle) stanza the best - great work. Thank you so much for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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"Whore" is not a very bad name to go with I guess.
Glad u enjoyed the flow...
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ummm i ment God
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now here's what u do...u take these amazing words of your with the amazing flow and the even more amazing intensity and u turn it around...
coz well...you're the god !
love u much
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I really like this - it's like like a trinket, with a short edgy flow.
But capitalise the 'I's.
=> Jess
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thx.
glad u like it...
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oh and :^) umm :^)
ur the God :^) -
omg :^)
omg omg omg :^)
wow :^)
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