&&
When our car crash hearts
Met in the [f.a.t.a.l] collision
(That’s what happens when
Two (warm )(wet)(thum-ping)
(thum-ping)
Objects
-Fly
through the air)
[kiss me b.a.b.y.
You don’t need to breathe]
&& hold me –tightly- all night long
While I dream dreams of *sighing*
One-night stands in cocaine-scented rooms
Of
Sparkled *glitter* darkness
Sweetheart…
This is Hollywood.
&& hold me –tightly-, honey,
‘Cause I need the sex—
&& it’s a thousand tears an hour
< wipe the mascara from your
Bedsheets when I go >
//away//
D.i.s.s.o.l.v.e.D.
d i s s o l v e d away
Just like the
Heroin
In your
{veins.}
((God, how I need a drink.))
Author notes
one of my first dp pieces. bashing will not offend, in fact, it's welcome.
I'm not going to delete it, though... having some of my shitty old poems here makes me feel like I'm improving. XD
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I definitely think that this is very cliche and there is way too much punctuation.
For the true definition of 'dirty pretty' look here:
http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=dirty+pretty
Good luck!
♥
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meh. This was one of my first dp poems-- I don't care about it (in fact, it sucks). On a brighter note, it makes me feel better about some of my more recent poems.
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very dirtyprettyie indeed.
i like it though.
a great poem with a nice style to it.
=]
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strange poem. havent read one like this...EVER. pretty nifty though. interesting to read.
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1.this is extremely cliche.
take out the hollywood sex and drugs and it might be ok.
2. too much puncutation.
there is no need for it. yes it USED to be the in thing. but its not now. it just takes away the attention ffrom the words.
its just too cliche.
sorry hun.
i didnt like it at all.
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