I've got the gun,
Keep driving,
Just keep driving,
It will all be okay.
Life on the run,
Drive to the graveyard,
Stand by our murdered child's grave,
End your days with me in a hail of bullets,
Just like she did,
I've got the gun.
I'll Kill you,
Then myself,
You have to remember,
We need to do this,
Return to her,
Apologise for all the things We put her through,
I'll pull the trigger,
Look at me,
I'll pull the trigger,
Before I kill myself,
I'll kill you.
Ive got the gun.
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I can't work out if this is incredibly sick or a piece of child genius. The gun culture is, of course, sick and worse than sick, but the abuse of a child is awful as well. This is put together in an articulate and interesting way but the content gives pause for thought.
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Thankyou for commenting
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A sense of insanity
A glimpse into a fractured mind. One that seems to have given up life and maybe its last inclination for satisfaction is to take another life with him into the dark. Chilling and stark. Is this a story of abuse? Is it the ranting of a lunatic? Is it the description of a criminal act. Revenge? Murder suicide seems the most obvious but thats this poems dark beauty. It could be any of these or maybe something else. It also imparts a sense of grief, of self hatred that makes this as pleasurable as passing a car accident. One wishes to look away but can't. It's a compulsion driven by the horror of the macabre. Good in a disturbing manner
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Thankyou, My poetry is usually abstarct and open for interpritation, It never has a real set meaning, maybe I have oe in mind, but other people might think its something else
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Think its powerful and insightful. I like how it can be taken in a concrete or an abstract sense.
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Thankyou so much for your comment.
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Wait... ummm.... what??????
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what do you mean by what?
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I mean... what's going on in this poem!
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Well it could be about anything but I wrote it to be about two parents who's daughter died (murdered/suicide)and they go to kill themselves by her grave to return to her, But you can take it by different meanings, If you have an abstract mind.
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What?
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wow
I dont know what to say. Wow. It was so powerful!! Its rrally good!! -
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Thanks, Do you like MCR by the way? I got some of the ideas for this from Demolition lovers.
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yep I love mcr, which I suppose helps people label me, but hey I labeled myself in my name, so what the heck lol
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I RELATE SO WELL WITH YOUR WORK.. DID YOU REALLY GO THROUGH IVE GOT THE GUN OR IS IT FICTIONAL?? YOUR VERY TALENTED
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No I didnt go through it, I just try to imagine what Its would be like, and I try to write about things that hapen out there, in the rel world. I hope it doesnt happen to me, but Im only 12, so I havent had any kids (obviously) and I got ideas from a song and from a book, then Freestyled it.
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I hear you and Im listening
Its sad what our world has come to causing the hard working people to fall from the police force not doing their jobs and we have to do what we feel is all thats left to do . So sad indeed
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Thanks for reading
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Really sad story this one. I'm sure if it's something you know that's happened or just an imagined situation but it's very well written. It's so good because even though the words being sad are scary and about death, it is spoken in a comforting way, that you "return to her, apologise for all the things we put her through".
Great job, i bet your pleased with this one!
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Tahnks, Its imaginary, I got a bit of the idea from a book I was reading a week ago, and from a song called demolition lovers, by My chemical romance.
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