Grumble, Grumble
Munch, Munch
Crunch, Crunch
Must eat more
I want more
Give me more
Beef
Chicken
Pork
I'll eat it all
I'll eat till I'm full
And then I'll eat more
It hurts
Ooh I ate to much
Make the pain stop
Must eat more
It tastes so good
Now I must have desert
Author notes
Written October 2nd, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- humor, black humor & twists by .
300 points, ended December 22, 2003, 9 entries
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LOL...Sounds as if you were writing about a holiday dinner at my house. I always say I am not going to eat a lot around the holidays, but it never fails, I always eat too much and then pay for it the rest of the night. Thanks for another excellent read.
~TXCowgirl -
Oh my god...That's like Thanksgiving at my house...Well...Excpet for me...My family must think that I'm anorexic or something...I'm not...But in all honesty...I just don't like my aunts cooking...I'll eat the scaloped potatos that my mom makes to take there...They're from scratch...Not that crappy box stuff...And dessert stuff...But otherwise...Ew...Now your probably thinking what about the turkey?...Well I don't like turkey plain...But give me some bread...Mashpotatos...And gravey...Then I'll eat it...Of couse I throw them all into the same bowl with some salt and pepper till my dad says it doesn't look like anything a normal human being should consume...But it's good all the same...So why don't I do it there?...That's simple...She uses box gravey and potatos...Ew...And has some weird kind of bread...Just plain white for me thanks...Anyways...Now that I've been talking about food and I'm about...Oh...thirty five minutes from being dismissed from class to lunch...I have made myself quite hungry...Anyways...Great write...Keep it up...~~Licks~~...~~Nutty
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This reminds me of past Thanksgiving and Christmas feasts at my mom’s. I used to eat like food was becoming extinct. I really dig your sense of humor because it kind of reminds me of mine.
~ John
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interestingly entertaining
I must congratulate you, for few have the courage to speak of such a topic that pledges America, and some other countries, in ways “not even thought possible!” Hence, "Gluttony is the root of all LUST...!" Perhaps it's only funny on a smaller scale?
Be this as it may, this was an entertaining write and “for this I am thankful!”
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I enjoyed this one. But where is the hot sausage and mustard? Hmmmm? What inspired it? Sounds like another good contest write.
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Great way to show a hunger. A food hunger that is. I really enjoyed this poem. Great and funny! Just a question about the words in the poem.. Maybe it's just me being that i'm only half awake a work right now but isn't desert mean the place and dessert mean food? Just food for thought!
Thanks for sharing!
Amanda -
this is kinda....um..... weird.... i guess it's funny.
~predatorsgirl~
kim
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och, there ye are full from devine meal, then they ambush ye wi' desert. ye canna refuse, that would be rude.... so ye find a we bit of extra space. though, i dinna recomment doing this often love, could prove hazourdous!
arden -
Argh.. you must be hungry. Erm, don't you hate that feeling, though? Eating.. until it hurts. And then it just ruins all your desire for desert.. but I suppose if gluttony truly has a hold on ya.. it doesn't quite ruin it. Boo for negative utils. =P
Good job on capturing the moment so well.. "make the pain stop, must eat more" =P
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