Heading towards the very first sunset,
with a smile and a pair of wild flip-flops,
a bag filled with no more sorrows,
as black temperamental curls
salute with excitement
the strange surroundings
from a runaway train window.
A ciggarette sets trace
for the no-returning...
Besides me,
a hand on a shoulder,
the kiss of the horizont,
so much time left
when you belong to every station.
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A contest entry
- WONDERFUL-FUNDERFUL TIMES TOGETHER OR ALONE by liquidmindforever.
425 points, ended November 10, 2007, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Safe? by Naridill.
495 points, ended November 11, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 108th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended December 17, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very very lovely
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Loved it. Very creative!
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I loved it. Fantastic job, its so creative!
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Well done
Wonderful poem. I love it!
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Interesting poem. Unique writing style. Go You!
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This was better than both the silver and gold winners of this contest. You should have won.
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Congrats on the bronze trophy. I have to say this was extremely dramatic. Everything about it was just so emotional including the picture... is that you? Either way, very intense. Thank you for entering this and good luck.
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thank you very much!
...no,that's not me in the pic but the atmosphere is identical...this poem is about an absolutely real episode in my life
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Very well written.
I pictured a scene so well for it too.
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very nice words ..all the best
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the kiss of the horizont,= Please edit this "horizon"
Very lovely.
Thank you for entering my contest: WONDERFULFUNDERFUL
THINGS TOGETHER OR ALONE
LOVELIGHTPEACE
liquid
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a pretty sense of wandering without a cuase i rather enjoyed it
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Seems like you're on a flow!! All of your newer poems are great...yet each of them has something special. I loved it...the imaginery, the visual images...all of it. Loved it to bits!!
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