You were a rainbow, with colours shining bright,
You were kindness, you were warmth and you were light.
I know you watch me from above, look down at me with love,
But it’s not the same.
Wish you were here.
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A contest entry
- Missing / Longing in 5 lines! by Beating.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow. I really, really over this poem. You say so much in so few lines, and it's really very powerful. Great job, well done!
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Aww, this was so sad and
very heartfelt. I know what
it's like to lose a loved one,
it's so hard to grasp,
and you'll always miss them
cause it is never the same,
like you said.
beautifully written
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Awww, so beautifull!!!! You did a fantastic job with this and congrats on your HM!
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You did a great write by the prompt. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy. I can feel the grief in the write by this line.
I know you watch me from above, look down at me with love,
But it’s not the same.
One can relate to this one very easy.
Simply brief and very elegant in nature. As my dog howls I must go. Great work.
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wow. great rhyming. Great flow. Great wording. Just so simple and truly beautiful. I wish I could say more, but you took my breath away. Just beautiful!
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This is almost asking the rainbow down, cos, I feel you are somehow enjoying life as it stands, Now that seems a positive stance on wishing one was there, liked the metaphor, almost human like up there. Nice one!
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i really appreciate the comment thank you!
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wel u have successfully displayed your emotions ....
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Powerful is your pen. This was a well written piece with great emotion.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes to you in this contest.
Tory -
This is a sad write
In so few words though, you have got a very strong message across to the reader. Well done and good luck in this contest 
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