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Respirations

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Respirations





Secrets lie there
in the folds of your half open lips
exhaling lover's potpourri

Forever is too short;
you whispered

Forever is yet to be;
I sighed

And in the middle grounds,
the medium of then and now
eyes locked on the same goal
(painted in different shades)

Untold truths lie there
in the creases of your half closed lips
inhaling the secret wishes of my heart




Author notes

then and now do not matter...only what is yet to be

for J

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  • Nicolette gold member
    October 7, 2007
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  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    October 5, 2007

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    I like the play on half "open" lips, then half "closed" lips. I love the presentation here. Thank you for a peak into this very private conversation. Lovely and good luck.

    ~Lyrical

  • Tercarro
    October 5, 2007
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    This is nice

    I love this, really enjoyed reading it.
    Thank you.


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Loved the sense of mystery here...of what is not being said, but also said (if I'm making any sense here, lol). Lovely structure to this poem and the voice so soft and romantic... such hope expressed here - and yes, faith in love. Lovely poetry - thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette

  • Eusebius
    October 2, 2007

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    bravo

    Highly romantic, intriguing, mysterious and very well done all around, loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 1, 2007
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    So beautiful!
    I love the pic.
    Forever IS too short IMHO

    Be Well


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 1, 2007
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      Mark,
      Your opinion is never humble dear friend. Thank you for such drops of tenderness on my page. I am ever so happy you enjoyed this little token.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean

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