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Even Though

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We are all victims of life.
Some are painfully ignored
desperately searching for love,
striving for acceptance and worth,
comfort absent in our childhood.

Do you remember missed hugs
accomplishments unnoticed,
never realizing pride.

Hushed were the words needed to thrive,
sad were the hearts that broke often,
hidden tears and dark corners
lonely solace for any child.

And when you are dying  
I will still hold your hand
comforting your last moments...
even though.

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  • Nicada silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    This is so sad and you have expressed yourself very well here. It is difficult to understand why so many children do not experience the unconditional love they should, especially from their own parents. My heart breaks everytime I hear pain like this. Writing can be so healing, and you are a strong person to be able to share this. The ending is especially powerful. Thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty


  • Never Fall in Love
    March 12, 2008

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    I like how you ended that very abruptly - causing the reader to think harder and crave for more. This is good - and aren't we all victims of life and death - finish one and start another

    Never ♥


  • Desire gold member
    October 4, 2007

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    OH My~~

    You certainly know how to take the reader and bring forth tears Beautiful one

    This tugs at the heartstrings
    certainly grabs hard
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!


    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 3, 2007

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    excellent~

    That first stanza is a clincher sis....
    A lot of children grow up like this....and you have penned the nail on the head with this poem..
    Emtional and sad...
    Penned excellent
    Best of luck in the contest...
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~~


  • superstition
    October 3, 2007

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    Such a powerful poem you were able to pen for this contest, and you had me right from the first line. The 'Victims of Life' set the mood for the entire poem right there, and it would've been hard to turn away once I started reading. You describe, so well, the anxiety and pain that some of us suffer through...the unnoticed and unrealized torment. You make your readers want to look into someone's eyes just a little bit longer so we don't miss anything anymore.

    'Hushed were the words needed to thrive,
    sad were the hearts that broke often,
    hidden tears and dark corners
    lonely solace for any child.'

    Those lines say it all. So beautiful yet sad. Excellent penning, as always.

  • Liquid memories
    October 1, 2007

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    You wrote my childhood, the pain, anxiety, my tears fell, reading this, so realistic, my story my sadness. Thank you for sharing this and the memories.


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    October 1, 2007

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    awwwww I was getting the chills when I read this...isn't it all so true...
    Your ending was such a sweet touch....

    Your the best friend one can have
    XXJeannette

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