You shake your head, glad--
The depth of your voice (and eyes)
has me lost, drowning.
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Rules are meant to help, not define.
Please tell me what you think
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So by reading the newest haiku column, I realize-- I pretty much follow the rules.
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ahh .. love is excellent, isnt it?
I have never gotten the real taste of it - or atleast I don't think I did - and I especially hope I didn't.
It's great thoguh so congrats to you!
All the best and keep writing,
Never ♥
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Nice
I like this poem. its very interesting and unique in its own ays. what really captured my attention was your quality with the word play and the way it flows. I love it how you wrote in a way a free style Haiku and its just pure brilliance. keep up the good work
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Thank you for entering our workshop.
You shake your head, glad--
The depth of your voice (and eyes)
has me lost, drowning.
It appears from your comments that you don't care to have any comments. For that reason I will pass. -
Welcome to our workshop.
You shake your head, glad--
The depth of your voice (and eyes)
has me lost, drowning.
(And I read you author's notes, but remember this is a workshop. Revisions are suggested, but you always have the choice of leaving your work as is)
L3 seems to be a statement and not an image, could you provide one for that line?
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