It is raining in the hallway,
my door rattles and wails
like it's holding back a storm.
I know a boy with rain behind his eyes.
It pours and pours
but never wets his face.
I know the rain and I know how it plays.
I know when to open the door
and let it cover me.
But he doesn't,
he won't ever see
the storm in the hallway.
Author notes
So I know it isn't solely about rain, but rain did inspire it for me and your contest did to.
A contest entry
- Oh how I wish, for soothing Rain by McRae by nature.
1000 points, ended October 2, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What is good? What is bad? What do you get from this?
Comments
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This left me shivering as I thought about the rain. I think that you did a wonderful job here and the imagery is great!
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It is raining in the hallway,
my door rattles and wails
like it's holding back a storm.
But he doesn't,
he won't ever see
the storm in the hallway.
I really liked these two verses in particular. This piece of poetry reminds me of a children's book I used to love "There's a sea in my Bedroom" Sometimes I still read it and reminisce! Its a great book...this is a great poem! -
I really like this.
It's beautiful.
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I think it is a great entry. Thanks.
Carrie
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