While time and tide bathe golden sand,
polychrome huts on shoreline stand,
protect, deflect scorching sunrays,
holding strong on fair-weather days.
Wood hut assembled, shored, nailed fast,
colour’s allure will summer last,
autumn winds breach, bright colour pales,
Mildewed drift wood with high tide sails.
Sky-scraper blocks erected swift,
sturdy façade may spirits lift,
horizon view though impressive,
bad weather shifts to oppressive.
Buffeting gales, acid rain storm,
corrosion, erosion, cracks form,
Earth rumble, walls tumble, no brace,
demolished wholly with out trace.
Cathedrals built on solid ground,
afford protection, guard all round,
foundations firmly fixed sustain,
stalwart companion will remain.
Resplendent beauty holds strength sure,
repels rigours, through storms endure,
withstands tremors, maintain, repair,
through tide of time, foundations bear.
Author notes
This poem is about the different types of friendships we form throughout life.
In a list
A contest entry
- What a friendship means to you.... by Word Artisan.
600 points, ended June 12, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your absolute BEST! (1,009 points, winner takes all) by AutumnsFlame.
1858 points, ended December 5, 2008, 31 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is a gold poetry. shucks. next time! i enjoyed reading it btw. thanks for sharing your work. t'care.
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I thought this poem is absolutely wonderful! I have nothing bad to say about it. No complaints WHATSOEVER... The rhyme and flow were right on! The imagery you used really puts an impact on the reader! Thank you for entering my contest. This is exactly what I was looking for!
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Like the form - end rhymes and internal.
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This was good. It took me a couple of reads to see your theme of friendships, but that doesn't mean I didn't enjoy it. You create a great rhythm and pace that really carries the reader through the piece. There's so much going on that I missed the idea the first time around, but maybe I'm a little thick... Nice work.
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This Was Good
I especialy liked yhe rhyming in it. I'm also glad to see you won a silver for it! Good job. -
very good poem. i have liked the last part of the poem more than the first part. i have read the whole poem with great interest and enjoyed. please keep writing these great poems...
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colour’s allure will summer last,
colour’s allure will summer last
beyond all silvers, golden glow
afford unhoarded, very fast
past fears fade as joy may show
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that is very good i love how you did this...just by using forms of wheather and forms of protection...i love it...thank you very much...ADAM
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Very clever wording here...Good friendships have firm foundations...they last forever. loved this one.
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first off i had to go look up some words, yep i have my thick mode on tonight lololol
but boy was it was the walk over to the bookcase lolol this is amazing love keep em coming xxx
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Excellent
Firstly Sorry it has taken me so long to read this not been to good. The poem is Excellent I really like the way you have used the structure of buildings to describe the many friendships we hold during a life time. of course there are those that are week and crumble, becoming not even a memory then those that remain a memory and of course then as you have put it friendships that are built like a Cathedral and will never die. Again loved the poem a brilliant take on this subject matter leaving one thinking about past friendships they have held all my best wishes Brian.
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Your words capture so well 'friendship' in all it's many guises. Looking back on life there are those you remember, bright, brash and bold, but are long gone, others more durable, but crumble by the wayside, and others for life, the best kind.
Your words were amazing and rhyme perfect. We may have a long wait between poems but when you do, you certainly come up with a good one!
Thanks for sharing this with us
Sue
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A VERY THOUGHT PROVOKING PEACE, INDEED.
I believe that our friendship will be like The Cathedral that will withstand the test of time for it is build on a strong and spiritual foundation, indeed! thanks for sharing this piece with me that i waited until it was time to go to bed to read. This is the strongest piece that i have seen from you - so far - and it flowed beautifully filled with truth and wisdom. I look forward to seeing your next piece whenever that may be.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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I think that this poem is a flawless piece of poetry that contains a very special meaning. There are many types of friends we make through life and your poem captures it perfectly. I read this piece over a few times and each time I do I can see something new in it that I never seen before. I think true friends possess a special bond that can stand the test of time and can weather any storm. I would like to thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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We have many different kinds of friends some last for a short time. while others remain with us for a life time. All meeting different needs.
Very thought provoking
Excellent
Love ~sugar~
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strong foundations...
Very insightful work my friend! This deep and thought provoking poem highlights the clarity of thought and maturity of spirit of the author perfectly! Excellent!
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